• My new song
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My new song
on: January 28, 2018, 16:56:48
« Last Edit: January 29, 2018, 01:27:09 by Mar T. »
Hi,

I've only posted one song here before but wondered what people think of this new one. Please don't judge my voice, I'm just a writer....Thank you!!

https://soundcloud.com/medievalpoet/lock-and-key-1 <-- Mar T. edit: @Annaw , you can just paste the link (not necessary to use [url] tags etc.. )

Hope the link works!

Anna

--Mar T. edit: I merged both threads..  ::) ::)


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Trying again!
Reply #1 on: January 28, 2018, 19:58:13
Hi,

The Soundcloud link wasn't working and I'm not sure why, so I'm trying again, with an mp3 attachment. Thanks!

Anna


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Re: My new song
Reply #2 on: January 28, 2018, 20:01:04
« Last Edit: January 28, 2018, 20:14:10 by Bill from November Sound »
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


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Re: Trying again!
Reply #3 on: January 28, 2018, 20:18:04
@Annaw
Yes yes yes, it works.
And I love it to pieces. And itís already been downloaded 4 times.

Whatever doubts you have about your voice, please donít. Donít have doubts. I fully understand youíre a writer.
But, as iím traveling, I only have earphones, it enhances the effect.
Nice, musically, small, as in intimate. I happen to think itís your calling card. Yard stick. You know what I mean?

Iím curious what the others will think of it, but my guess is favorably.
And I can always say I was there when you posted your first entry here.

Donít change too much on account of reviews here, please. May I ask to start thinking of your new entry?
Great!
Kind regards, Gus
 


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Re: My new song
Reply #4 on: January 28, 2018, 20:31:24
Thank you Bill!

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Re: Trying again!
Reply #5 on: January 28, 2018, 20:33:06
Thank you Gus for your kind words!

It's so great to be able to share my songs with some other writers and I'm very happy to have criticism...I can take it!  But I'm glad you like the song. I had the melody in my head for a while but waited a while for the words.

Anna


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Re: My new song
Reply #6 on: January 28, 2018, 20:48:34
thanks @Bill from November Sound ....that link works, yes that works  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

@Annaw very, very nice, great piano songwriting, very strong songwriting in my ears
with beautiful voice  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

Nice!!  :o :o :o ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
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Re: My new song
Reply #7 on: January 28, 2018, 20:51:49
Thanks Bill,

I'm working on the writing, so thanks for the encouragement! Just sent my first song off to a music publisher so I'll see what happens....not getting my hopes up though!

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Re: My new song
Reply #8 on: January 28, 2018, 21:15:51
Hey @Annaw .....this really is a very well written song. It flows well and it build nicely.

I also agree with Gus.... @LePlongeur .....that you should not be so quick to dismiss your vocal abilities. I am hearing the soul of this song in your voice and with a little more attention to delivery and maybe a little mixing love you would be smiling when you listen back.

I'd love it if you posted the lyrics.

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Re: My new song
Reply #9 on: January 28, 2018, 21:24:25
Yes @Annaw please post the lyrics! I've enjoyed listening to it thus far and if you post the lyrics we can kind of follow along with you.  :)


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Re: My new song
Reply #10 on: January 28, 2018, 21:44:27
Hi here are the lyrics, thanks for your insightful comments!  I only record by sitting at my keyboard and singing into my camera lol, I have no idea about how to record properly. I wish I did!

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Re: My new song
Reply #11 on: January 28, 2018, 21:46:42
Sorry, forgot to paste the lyrics:

Under lock and key

Iím thinking maybe you have misunderstood,
cos Iíve seen those little furtive glances.
Boy you should know that I just want to be friends,
cos Iím not used to taking chances.
Still, each time we meet, I feel something new inside,
It keeps me awake at night.
You say that Iím sweet,
But you donít know the me inside,
the real me the one I hide.

Chorus

My lifeís never lonely,
cos I trust in my heart only
I just canít give it up,
no I just canít give it up.
All those tears I cried,
Are locked up deep inside
and I just canít give them up,
no I just canít give them up
to anyone.
Cos they belong to no one else but me,
and I keep my heart safe under lock and key.

I collected every single cruel word they said,
used them for building up protection.
So if I seem a little distant with friends,
I donít know how to show affection.

Still, when Iím with you,
those walls they donít feel so strong,
I feel like I could belong,
Can you handle the truth,
Iíve never told a soul before,
cos all these memories feel so raw,

(Chorus)

(Bridge)

I donít want to open up,
and risk losing you,
I donít wanna talk about
the things Iíve been through,
Youíre asking questions I donít know what to say,
Should I give in or do I just walk away?

Chorus twice

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Re: My new song
Reply #12 on: January 28, 2018, 23:06:59
Hi @Annaw ,
Thatís a wonderful song, thanks for sharing! YouĎre a very talented songwriter, and your singing is not bad either.
Properly produced, and sung with just a little more confidence, this could be splendid. I sense lots of potential here... :)
Cheers,
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Re: Trying again!
Reply #13 on: January 28, 2018, 23:56:57
« Last Edit: January 29, 2018, 00:58:47 by Mar T. »
I looooved this track @Annaw ! Raw as it is.. Nice piano work and I love your voice, no need to feel inconfident about your singing imo..
What I liked most in the piano work is the dynamics (soft and loud notes) and I loved the chord progressions, beautiful!
In your singing I'd try to expiriment even more with dynamics (soft and 'even louder' singing). But that's the only nit I found.
Would you mind posting the lyrics along with the song? <--- Excuse me, you added them in the other thread. I merged both threads...

I think you'll like @Rachel_D 's work as well, check her work out!  ;) ;)

Cheers, and thanks for sharing this beauty with us!
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I'm proud of this track, check it out! https://soundcloud.com/martimedia/dreams


Re: My new song
Reply #14 on: January 29, 2018, 02:39:14
@Annaw    I think your song is very strong lyrically and emotionally. I get a good idea of the song from your demo.   ::thumb::
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