• Nails Are Tougher Than Me -- New Major Layerson collab/ experiment
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Hi Everyone,

A month or so ago I began recording myself reading my lyrics in order to give Micke a sense of the rhythm I heard in my head. It was also meant, since English is not his first language, to help him pronounce some of the words.

He mentioned, in passing, an interest in using parts of my readings in upcoming songs.

A few days ago, while fighting the flu, and unable to sing, he decided to use my reading for the whole vocal.

Here it is... let us know what you think.

https://soundcloud.com/smajor1/nails-are-touger-than-me/s-ZLaC7


   Nails Are Tougher Than Me

Verse 1:
I was brought up
to think like a soldier,
to guard every emotion
in a tight metal cage
I learned how to shut down
and suck it all in
but no one ever taught me
how to live with my rage

Chorus:
I once thought
I was tougher than nails
and my heart was as hard
as heat hardened steel rails
but now I've been hammered by life
I can see
nails are tougher,
nails are tougher than me.

Verse 2:
It's taken so long
to accept that I'm human;
to feel what I'm feelin',
and not act like a clown.
Back then I was broken
now I'm broken open;
when our daughter came to us
my heart melted down

Bridge:
Indifference isn't a virtue,
choose coldness and it's you who will lose,
I learned this lesson the hard way
now it's yours to use or misuse.

Repeat Chorus:
I'm a lyricist seeking music writers to work with.


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This is truly excellent......a very avant garde piece of performance art. That reading has such good cadence and vocal tone and the vocal processing variations really add an interesting dimension. The backing track is a perfect vehicle for the reading.

I REALLY like how the music swells toward the end....just excellent production choices throughout the piece.

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I REALLY like this @smajor and @Layerson !!


I'm not sure you can better it tbh! Although I'm sure if Micke sings it it will bring a new energy to it but I love this version with you seeking it Stan! And a great track - you have done a great job with it I must say.


A revelation!


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perfect @smajor  en @Layerson  - this is very good. Touch of Gothic with the organ in the latter part.
The reading doesn't sound too different from singing or rapping. There is for sure a cool cadence in this, as @Leonard Scaper  writes.
More like these I say!
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


« Last Edit: February 02, 2019, 22:11:50 by M57 »
Hey Stan, I listened and read the lyric before reading your introductory post, and it seemed very apparent to me that your reading was a guideline for an eventual vocalist - and a very good one (I.e. the kind I would like to work with) in that it didn't really make any specific demands of the singer, but yet made clear the general placement of phrases.  Cut to the chase, my vote would be to get a singer on this one.  Otherwise, it's music with a superimposed poetry reading, which is fine if that's the goal.  But really, you have clearly written a real lyric here and it seems like a waste of effort to not render it into music.

I really enjoyed the music and production of this one.  The metallic sound palette that paints the background to this lyric is well-executed.  As I consider it as music minus the lead vocal it's fine so far.  The one thing I don't really think works is the final line of the lyric, which abruptly moves from 1st person to preaching.   I would much prefer a solution that remains introspective, like..  I wish others could learn from my pain/mistakes.

-Mark

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Hi @smajor
Your lyrics portray learning of life that tanned people in hardness and insensibility leaving aside the warmth of beautiful feeling. I'm glad to see the sincerity of your awakening on the other side of life.
I loved verse 2 as well as the instrumentation of your song. I find it really really interesting, abstract at some moments and, like the lyrics, strong.
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Hi @Leonard Scaper , @Zedd , @oorlab , @M57, @Mora Amaro La Loba

Thank you all for the great comments. The general opinion seems to be for us to keep experimenting. That's what we plan to do.

I tend to agree with you, Mark, about this lyric... as I said using it as a vocal wasn't my original intention. The thing is I do have real poetry I'd like to try this on... that's what I find most exciting.

Later,
Stan


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A great job
Very interesting
Congratulations  ::thumb::


Intro is great already got me with this , love this high piano arps, like drops
Anne Clark would love this too I guess.
Very good arrangement , keeps the listener to discover more and more of this story  of a song.
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