• Naked Near the Tree
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Naked Near the Tree
on: May 12, 2019, 12:33:21
« Last Edit: May 25, 2019, 19:23:44 by DonMar »
Not realIy for review, since the song is finished. But I feel my collaborator (Mike Zaneski) did a really fine job with it;  I simply want to share.  :) (He also did a version with longer solos, but kept this one under the 03:50 mark.)

https://soundcloud.com/donmar-2/naked-near-the-tree-short-full-version-25-wav/s-czrtm

Naked Near the Tree

V1
The first one hid in Amsterdam, in shabby coffee shops
Getting high on Silver Haze to make the memories stop
...But every moment follows where he goes 

V2
The second fled to Mazatlan, to dingy mezcal bars
Trying to kill the conscience that sticks to him like tar
...But every mirror shows him what he knows

V3
The third wound up in Bangalore, then shaved off all his hair
Hoping to redeem himself by chanting Hindu prayers
...But every morning finds his past exposed

Chorus
Me, I'm strapped in
Waiting for the needle's bitter grace
Her parents sit like stone
Yet I can look them in the face
I mouth the words 'I'm innocent'
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

Brief solo

Bridge
Saw the three running past the old mill creek
Found her dying, tried to help her breathe
But the jury wasn't buying my 'not guilty' plea
...My hands were stained with blood
From the scene of that crime   
...And the town…well, it cried out for mine

Chorus
Now I'm strapped in
Waiting for the needle's bitter grace
Her parents sit like stone
Yet I can look them in the face
I mouth the words 'I'm innocent'
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

Outro
I can look them in the face
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

I mouth the words ‘I’m innocent’
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

© 2019 Donna Devine (lyrics/chorus melody) / Mike Zaneski (music/melody/vocals)
Honour the earth. Without It, we'd be nowhere. - D.D.


Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #1 on: May 12, 2019, 16:15:01
This is a beautiful song, Donna......and a fantastic production and performance of it.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #2 on: May 12, 2019, 17:21:52
WOW  :o :o :o :o that is a very beautiful song @DonMar   ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

and a great voice on this  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

who is your secret collaborator this time, Donmar? what a great vocal and musical performance  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #3 on: May 15, 2019, 21:40:42
@Leonard Scaper and @Dutchbeat, thank you for listening, and for your very nice comments.  :) I'll pass them on to my collaborator.  :)

Donna


Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #4 on: May 16, 2019, 22:59:00
Hello @DonMar . This song is my introduction to your work. I enjoyed the whole-  a strong story line  with lots of well written detail - the chorus image is powerful!
Your collaborator delivers a fine vocal ( and harmony).
A very good song  on such a difficult subject.

Robert


Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #5 on: May 17, 2019, 11:25:53
« Last Edit: May 17, 2019, 11:27:37 by Mora Amaro La Loba »
Hi @DonMar

Terrible story, terrible innocence ignored, terrible blind justice, a perfect description of the scene, the 3 fleeing and he helping...
Good lyrics as always, good argument, good song. Your collaborator reminds me of a person I know, his tone of voice and his style are so similar.

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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #6 on: May 20, 2019, 17:04:40
@robertkc  and @Mora Amaro La Loba, thank you for listening, and for your kind comments.  :)

It's awful to think that this type of miscarriage of justice still occurs.

Donna



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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #7 on: May 25, 2019, 19:15:08
Hi @DonMar ,

This, in my mind, is a tour de force. Both lyrically and musically.

The story engaged me from the first line. The chorus was a shock. And the bridge a revelation (like bridges are supposed to be).  And everything worked on a basic emotional level... despite all the different perspectives the reasons why each person was feeling what they were feeling made sense to me. On a deep level.

And Mike was able to capture all that with a superb musical production.

This is top notch work, Donna (of course you know this). I just want you to know that I've seen what you've done. Not many can do what you did.

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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #8 on: May 27, 2019, 02:01:07
Hi @DonMar really atmospheric & emotional song that had me hooked from the opening notes.


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Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #9 on: May 27, 2019, 03:30:02
Very impressive @DonMar - the lyrics tell a story and I really like how the vocals deliver it.

A really nice production and I echo the other comments.

Well done to you and Mike Zaneski

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