• Naked Near the Tree
  • Started by DonMar
0 Members and 1 Guest are viewing this topic.
  • DonMar
  • Patissier
  • *
  • Karma Hunter

    • 69


    • 15
    • May 21, 2019, 09:19:26
    • Delft, Netherlands
  • more
Naked Near the Tree
on: May 12, 2019, 12:33:21
« Last Edit: May 12, 2019, 18:11:15 by DonMar »
Not realIy for review, since the song is finished. But I feel my collaborator (Mike Zaneski) did a really fine job with it;  I simply want to share.  :) (He also did a version with longer solos, but kept this one under the 03:50 mark.)

https://soundcloud.com/donmar-2/naked-near-the-tree-short-full-version-25-wav/s-czrtm

Naked Near the Tree

V1
The first one hid in Amsterdam, in shabby coffee shops
Getting high on Silver Haze to make the memories stop
...But every moment follows where he goes 

V2
The second fled to Mazatlan, to dingy mezcal bars
Trying to kill the conscience that sticks to him like tar
...But every mirror shows him what he knows

V3
The third wound up in Bangalore, then shaved off all his hair
Hoping to redeem himself by chanting Hindu prayers
...But every morning finds his past exposed

Chorus
Me, I'm strapped in
Waiting for the needle's bitter grace
Her parents sit like stone
Yet I can look them in the face
I mouth the words 'I'm innocent'
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

Brief solo

Bridge
Saw the three running past the old mill creek
Found her dying, tried to help her breathe
But the jury wasn't buying my 'not guilty' plea
...My hands were stained with blood
From the scene of that crime   
...And the town…well, it cried out for mine

Chorus
Now I'm strapped in
Waiting for the needle's bitter grace
Her parents sit like stone
Yet I can look them in the face
I mouth the words 'I'm innocent'
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

Outro
I can look them in the face
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

I mouth the words ‘I’m innocent’
But the only thing they see
Is their daughter lying naked near the tree

© 2019 Donna Devine (lyrics/melody) / Mike Zaneski (music/melody/vocals)
Honour the earth. Without It, we'd be nowhere. - D.D.


  • Leonard Scaper
  • Global Moderator
  • Executive Chef
  • *
  • *
  • Guest Chef

    • 3438


    • 1111
    • Yesterday at 21:41:59
    • Terra Firma
  • more
Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #1 on: May 12, 2019, 16:15:01
This is a beautiful song, Donna......and a fantastic production and performance of it.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

Lenny's Tunes: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=540680

https://soundcloud.com/vincentgleason


  • Dutchbeat
  • MADministrator
  • Michelin Starred Chef
  • *
  • *
  • If you can stand the Beat, get into the Kitchen!

    • 8404


    • 1400
    • Today at 10:09:07
  • more
Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #2 on: May 12, 2019, 17:21:52
WOW  :o :o :o :o that is a very beautiful song @DonMar   ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

and a great voice on this  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

who is your secret collaborator this time, Donmar? what a great vocal and musical performance  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
me, myself, and Pie


  • DonMar
  • Patissier
  • *
  • Karma Hunter

    • 69


    • 15
    • May 21, 2019, 09:19:26
    • Delft, Netherlands
  • more
Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #3 on: May 15, 2019, 21:40:42
@Leonard Scaper and @Dutchbeat, thank you for listening, and for your very nice comments.  :) I'll pass them on to my collaborator.  :)

Donna


Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #4 on: May 16, 2019, 22:59:00
Hello @DonMar . This song is my introduction to your work. I enjoyed the whole-  a strong story line  with lots of well written detail - the chorus image is powerful!
Your collaborator delivers a fine vocal ( and harmony).
A very good song  on such a difficult subject.

Robert


Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #5 on: May 17, 2019, 11:25:53
« Last Edit: May 17, 2019, 11:27:37 by Mora Amaro La Loba »
Hi @DonMar

Terrible story, terrible innocence ignored, terrible blind justice, a perfect description of the scene, the 3 fleeing and he helping...
Good lyrics as always, good argument, good song. Your collaborator reminds me of a person I know, his tone of voice and his style are so similar.

XXXX  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
My Youtube channel:
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCAaK7mFK7fUpf1E99I1Qtow
My Vimeo Songs of Thought channel:
https://vimeo.com/channels/moraamarolaloba
My Vimeo Downtempo channel:
https://vimeo.com/channels/moramarolalobadowntempo


  • DonMar
  • Patissier
  • *
  • Karma Hunter

    • 69


    • 15
    • May 21, 2019, 09:19:26
    • Delft, Netherlands
  • more
Re: Naked Near the Tree
Reply #6 on: May 20, 2019, 17:04:40
@robertkc  and @Mora Amaro La Loba, thank you for listening, and for your kind comments.  :)

It's awful to think that this type of miscarriage of justice still occurs.

Donna




xx
NAKED (TO ALL THE LEADERS AT G20)

Started by Malone on Songs for review

5 Replies
308 Views
Last post July 10, 2017, 10:38:51
by Malone
xx
WTF IS A NAKED CHORUS? | Feedback Friday S2E8

Started by Friedemann on The kitchen café

4 Replies
410 Views
Last post February 19, 2016, 15:05:56
by Friedemann
xx
Tree is done...

Started by Mark Luto on The kitchen café

2 Replies
231 Views
Last post December 24, 2017, 14:52:27
by Mar T.
xx
First Song - Top of a tree

Started by Catwendish on Songs for review

11 Replies
651 Views
Last post June 07, 2016, 13:05:08
by Zedd
xx
Tort- If a Tree Falls

Started by Ghost Seminar on Songs for review

2 Replies
287 Views
Last post July 02, 2016, 21:30:27
by Dutchbeat