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New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
on: February 06, 2017, 21:02:22
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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #1 on: February 06, 2017, 21:34:57
sounds good. Full sounds - not too overcompressed or too full of elements. Only tip I could give - the rain sound in the beginning could have a longer fade out.
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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #2 on: February 07, 2017, 03:16:31
@shatiks you say you are not an English speaker. But the way you repeat single words in the chorus is interesting and very effective lyrical device IMO. I am going to think about this a bit more. Great to have you posting on here


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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #3 on: February 07, 2017, 10:01:10
Thanks for feedback ! You are right !


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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #4 on: February 08, 2017, 01:01:37
Hey @shatiks, copied the lyrics from Soundcloud so we can
read along:

Lyrics
without you i'm feeling empty
without you i'm slowly die
heavy rain it's my surrounding
easy way forget your lie

forget
forget
forget your lie

1
without you i'm feeling empty
without you i'm slowly die
heavy rain it's my surrounding
easy way forget your lie
don't you now that you are killer
pretty Beast with big blue eyes
every time you disappear
and destroy my paradise

destroy
destroy
my paradise

2.
under rain i'm start recover
under rain i'm fly to stars
no more pain, no more tomorrow
without you I will survive
raindrops wash away my sorrow
bring me back to my new life
I don't wanna be your lover
cos i know - you not the one

i know
i know
you not the one

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I loved the instrumental, I think you will like @Dutchbeat 's
style as well!
For me the vocals were a bit too loud in the mix. That's my
only suggestion for this production. Besides that I loved the
listen!
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PS Did you introduce yourself in the 'Me' board? Maybe I missed it, kind of busy this last two weeks..  ;) ;) If not: may I invite you to write a bit about yourself and your musical background in that section of the kitchen?
I'm proud of this track, check it out! https://soundcloud.com/martimedia/dreams


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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #5 on: February 08, 2017, 11:50:32
Thanks for the advice! I will try to fix it!)


Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #6 on: February 08, 2017, 12:08:51
Very classical in that way that electro dance with a euro inflection can be, nice. Reminds me of being caught in a storm in a Mediterranean island last summer...


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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #7 on: February 08, 2017, 20:07:52
I'm from Lviv.Ukraine. But lived in different countries.I think it markedly in my liriks )


Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #8 on: February 08, 2017, 23:28:17
Well done!    I like the mood you are setting.   I do agree I can hear a lot of worldly influences in this song.     I enjoyed listening to it
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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #9 on: February 09, 2017, 00:16:22
sounds good. clean and well produced.
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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #10 on: February 10, 2017, 11:07:20
Thank you guys! It inspires me go forward!)


Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #11 on: February 12, 2017, 19:28:13
Hi @shatiks  ,

I’ve been replaying your song. I really like it :D  – I love the style, the mood, the rhythm you used and the way the sounds of the sung words relate to the music. I like the link to the rainfall imagery and the fact that you actually introduced the rain/thunder sounds at the beginning – it sounds really cool together with the beat. I tend to agree with @oorlab  that the rain sound could actually take longer to fade out.

I understand that you’re not a native English speaker and I can see that there are some small grammatical and spelling errors in the lyrics. These could be corrected by replacing some of the words. However, I did not give that importance when listening – and I could perfectly understand the meaning and the intent of the song. However, if you’re writing a new song and would like to get feedback on the lyrics before recording it feel free to post it in the 'LYRICS' board and we could help out by pointing any language errors, if you want.

I think you’ve done a great job with this song, and I’m already looking forward to your next one :)
Keep on creating!! :)

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Re: New creation from my kitchen - Heavy rain
Reply #12 on: March 12, 2017, 15:43:15
Small update !



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