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New song for review!
on: September 13, 2019, 14:32:36
Hey everyone, heres a simple song i made last night which I'm looking for review and critique on!
Lyrics are on the link below


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Re: New song for review!
Reply #1 on: September 13, 2019, 17:28:36
VERY cool tune!!! Love how the vocals present and love the lyrics.

I'd stick a distorted electric guitar break in the middle....some sort of Neil Young style thing....and then bring it to a full stop before going back to that super cool beat that you have going.

Great production as is, though.
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Re: New song for review!
Reply #2 on: September 13, 2019, 21:43:35
hi @Jon
interesting from the first second, great intro  :yes: :yes: :yes: :yes:

sounds great to me, although perhaps.. some more contrast between the confined, strict, measured...(looking for the english words here), tightly designed... music backing track

and the vocal going more out there, more full out.at places..higher and louder at certain points

could work? i think it would give it a great 80's dark new wave-ish synthesizer hit song sound

but.....this sounds good  :thumbsup: :thumbsup: :thumbsup: Mix it BIG  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
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Re: New song for review!
Reply #3 on: September 13, 2019, 22:38:24
Really liked the “dark vibe” of the melody and the “light vibe” of the vocals. It really went well together.

Re: New song for review!
Reply #4 on: September 14, 2019, 14:49:13
Hi @Jon

I find your track really interesting! Love dark sound, dark style... But.. perhaps you could introduce a new colour among what is dark, something that break the so fixed beat to enhance the voice and its peculiar tone. ::thumb::
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Re: New song for review!
Reply #5 on: September 14, 2019, 18:00:37
 @Jon  I enjoyed the dark mood and creative use of a simple electro backing. Vocals are clear and a little soulful... I agree with @Dutchbeat  that a change in intensity could work wonders.


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Re: New song for review!
Reply #6 on: September 18, 2019, 01:32:22
hi @Jon

I'll start by saying this isn't my type of thing so I don't listen to a lot (well hardly any) of this genre.

But I did like the darkness of it.

Like the others have said, for me, a change of some kind would sound interesting. I like @Leonard Scaper suggestion of a distorted Neil Young type guitar.


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