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New song "Too dark thoughts"
on: February 28, 2015, 22:21:09
« Last Edit: February 28, 2015, 23:42:06 by fischermans »
And here is another new song of mine which is a bit more produced.

https://soundcloud.com/a-fisch-1/too-dark-thoughts-270215-2036

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Verse 1
It's a time we hope we are strong
It's a time we hope it last long
It's a time we hope we can't be wrong

Pre Chorus
There's no reason time standing still
in my heads thoughts to kill
no step forward no step back
shipping restless in my bed

Chorus
Too dark thoughts
Too dark dreams
wrong desires
burns like fire
search for salvation
search for explanations

Verse 2
It's a time when we where young enough
It's a time when we felt so tough
It's a time when our live was rough

Pre Chorus
There's no reason time standing still
in my heads thoughts to kill
no step forward no step back
shipping restless in my bed

Chorus
Too dark thoughts
Too dark dreams
wrong desires
burns like fire
search for salvation
search for explanations

? Voice, Words and Music Alexander Fisch aka fischermans ?

Hope you like. ;)


Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #1 on: February 28, 2015, 22:42:30
« Last Edit: February 28, 2015, 23:14:46 by Zedd »
Lovely Alexander.. Love the lyrical feel (would like to see the lyrics written)... Love the production.. Sounded great...

I'm not sure about the xylophone (was that what it was?)... I found it a little distracting and I think I preferred when it was absent.. But that's just me.. I would use a little less...

Really lovely piece..

Z


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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #2 on: March 01, 2015, 12:12:49
I like the song, the vocals, and i like the guitar a lot, especially that broken chord riff and the pauses (which are very characteristic for Fischermans' songs)

i am not sure about the xylophone and strings, i hope it is ok to say that, well in the first half of the song that is, for me it takes a bit before they start to fall into place (in my ears)

but the lyrics, melody and singing are great i think, so karma points for your new track from here!

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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #3 on: March 02, 2015, 01:37:26
Enjoyed this Fisch.  Loved the strings in the arrangement and like the others I was unsure of the xylophone but only at the very start. I think it was fine later when it was playing behind the strings. Perhaps you if you started the strings at the same time as the xylophone it would help them sit nicer into your mix. They are perhaps just a wee bit stark at the front end of the song. But nothing wrong with the notes and how they are played.

The guitar play is so good and I have had I said it before on other songs of yours I have commented on, your ability to record a fat guitar sound is amazing. It is such a sweet sound you get.
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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #4 on: March 02, 2015, 20:21:51
Hi Alexander,

The guitar sounds great. I like the synth as well - i think the two create a nice mood - that conflict between natural and artificial if you like. The xylophone - not sure.
It has your signature melancholy which is always nice to hear.

Good stuff.

Digger


Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #5 on: March 04, 2015, 00:39:00
Gentle reminder to Alexander - I'm still really interested in getting the chords if you're still willing to share?

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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #6 on: March 04, 2015, 00:59:05
Hello Zedd
I haven't forgotten but w as ill. Also it's not this song you want the chords but it was this song: https://songwriting.createaforum.com/song-review/9834-waters-of-forgetfulness-9834-new-song/
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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #7 on: March 06, 2015, 21:28:41
@Karen
Thank you for your words
@Digger
Thanks.The xylophone is not 100 % timing wise but I like it. ;D ;D
@Alan
Thank you for your friendly words and for your hints.
@dutch
Thanks and yes it's always ok to place critic.Thats one reason why I post here. ;)
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Re: New song "Too dark thoughts"
Reply #8 on: March 07, 2015, 12:10:30
this is lovely Alexander and I agree, it has your signature melancholy atmosphere, which is always an enjoyable listen :) very beautiful lyrics :) stellar guitar and vocal  :)

I like the synth, although I think I would build into it and I would not bring the xylophone till later and only sparingly(only my opinion though)  :o

I think a low cello would sound really cool in this :) Nice one  :)