• New song "Wish I Didnt Love You" ending is off?
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Reply #15 on: March 25, 2019, 11:22:41
@Mora Amaro La Loba thank you very much!! I agree about the ending. I think in this case not saying the hook again (end tag) makes it stronger. I appreciate your senses!   ;D
Do what makes your heart sing :)


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Re: New song "Wish I Didnt Love You" ending is off?
Reply #16 on: March 28, 2019, 23:56:56
Hi @Kellyanneg ,

Micke @Layerson  just introduced your music to me. And now I'm a fan. After one song.

I don't often see lyrics work so well in expressing the heart of a song. I like your turns of phrase.

I do have to say though, despite enjoying the pun, that most people are going to hear "rain" , not "reign".  But that's okay. It works either way.

In my estimation (I'm only a lyricist) it's good to have spaces.

But I do think I hear what you mean about the ending. It doesn't quite resolve completely. From the point of view of a lyricist I'd suggest something like... "I no longer live in the past/ there are no mirrors left on this car."

Regarding Audacity... some of the songs I've created with Micke were done with Audacity tracks (using an USB microphone)... and someone who used to post here used Audacity exclusively (and still does as far as I know)... you can check her out here.... https://nicevennett.bandcamp.com/

And I can't help it.... I'm going to inflict on you the one song that Nic and I did together... https://mswithmajorlyrics.bandcamp.com/track/doin-the-moo-cow-moo

I've just probably given you a twisted impression of a whole raft of things.  But I stand where I am.

Later,
Stan

I'm a lyricist seeking music writers to work with.


Re: New song "Wish I Didnt Love You" ending is off?
Reply #17 on: March 30, 2019, 12:52:26
@smajor hello! Yes, I know what you mean about  the listener hearing "rain", but left the lyric written that way as a way to give it another meaning if read. Just a quirky thing I did!  And Nic's music has such a gentle almost ethereal feel to it...beautiful harmonies, and moving. And knowing she uses/used Audacity is truly encouraging and helpful. Much appreciated. Thank you for your suggestion with "Drive", I am hoping that song will be one I can throw into the audacity project. I feel I can't learn fast enough. One step at a time.  :)


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Reply #18 on: March 30, 2019, 14:30:48
Hi @Kellyanneg ,

I'm glad to hear that my suggestions/ideas were useful to you  :)

Quirky is cool as long as you know it's a quirk. I have to warn you though, having written lyrics for over fifty years now, few people read lyrics. A lot of people don't even really hear them. They go for the "beat".

I'm looking forward to hearing your progress. You're doing great!

Later,
Stan



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