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One Heart Whole
on: August 15, 2018, 10:05:36
one heart whole

Feedback very welcome  :D

This was actually a quick write, written only a few months ago.
Various versions were recorded in those recent few months too.

I've mixed feelings about it to be honest, the acoustic version is nasty that way too.


https://soundcloud.com/rightly/one-heart-whole-1


one heart whole


there's a warm breeze
  and many ways to survive
     take your worries
   and hang them out to dry
  hear me if I'm not mistaken
          forgive me all I know
 many loves must be forsaken
         to make just one heart whole
      to make just one heart whole

      your wily ways
    all these secrets and lies
should have no place
     in your heart or mine
  any thorn can be misleading
     and discolour the rose
 left undone, distraught n needy
   leave me anything but broke
   to make just one heart whole

   drop all defense , discard pretense
      relinquish resistance, be still

    hear me if I'm not mistaken
          forgive me all I know
   many loves must be forsaken
       to make just one heart whole

   leave me anything but broke
      to make just one heart whole

 there's a warm breeze and many ways to
                          survive
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Re: One Heart Whole
Reply #1 on: August 15, 2018, 14:17:28
I really like your music....you have a very unique performance style that I find very listenable.

I am feeling a slight disconnect with this one between the music and the lyrics and your vocal performance of them. I like both....but they are not quite fitting together for me. I'd love to hear some of the other versions....particularly an acoustic version.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

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Re: One Heart Whole
Reply #2 on: August 17, 2018, 21:25:22
I really like your music....you have a very unique performance style that I find very listenable.

I am feeling a slight disconnect with this one between the music and the lyrics and your vocal performance of them. I like both....but they are not quite fitting together for me. I'd love to hear some of the other versions....particularly an acoustic version.

This song is peculiar. But it is really growing on me. There are moments when I even feel proud of it.

I intend to do an acoustic version. There are a whole lot of songs I've been meaning to record acoustically.
There's often a problem with finding the time.

Thanks for taking an interest and your honest appraisal. I do appreciate it!!



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