• Original Song "Radical Blues"
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Original Song "Radical Blues"
on: December 27, 2018, 08:57:47
Greetings,

I've been working on some original songs to be performed with solo bass, vocals, and looping. So here's a clip of my song "Radical Blues". Any feedback would be appreciated, and thanks for listening.


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Radical Blues

Gold wrapper whirling
Church steeple spikes the sky
Heís smoking his last cigarette
As cars go zooming by
His smoke hits cement
And he turns to go

(Chorus)
But these feelings that he fought
Like a fly he canít swat
He canít let it go
He canít let it go
Like a child without a home
Like a dog without a bone

Bad news in the paper
Bad news on the box
So heís roaming, yeah heís roaming now
He just wants to talk, about disappearing grizzly bears
And diamonds in the Congo

Chorus

Tired of the mean streets, and all the urban sprawl
So he packed up his backpack
To get away from it all.
Like a salmon he roamed, but a hostel ainít a home
No a hostel ainít a home.

He just wants a quiet life, football in the front yard
A little baby and a wife, it canít be that hard
Green grass in the suburbs, angels in the snow

Chorus


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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #1 on: December 27, 2018, 10:32:51
I love this concept....very bold and very well done with some nice tight playing as well. The song works nicely with this format.  I was definitely caught up in the performance.

As far as constructive feedback.......watch your mic technique as there were times when you were too close and caused a bit of vocal distortion and times when you were too far away. Also watch your instrument levels as there were a couple of distorted notes on the bass.

I'd love to hear more of this style from you as I really enjoyed listening.
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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #2 on: December 27, 2018, 15:11:07
Thanks for your comments, Leonard. I appreciate the feedback. I still struggle a bit with singing, playing, and clicking pedals on and off. I'll try to smooth that out with more practice. 


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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #3 on: December 27, 2018, 16:17:14
I still struggle a bit with singing, playing, and clicking pedals on and off.

I am remembering back when I first began to actually sing and play guitar at the same time.....it was a supreme challenge. Throwing a microphone into that mix later on was definitely a further complication. Then, in later years as a performer, I threw a foot pedal operated vocal harmonizer and the learning curve began anew.

So.........I am feeling your growth pain here.  :)



Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #4 on: December 28, 2018, 20:25:26
I find your lyrics describe a heavy reality of a lot of people... I liked your song but I think the same as @Leonard Scaper, I'm sure that in your next song you'll have taken care of controlling your closeness or separation from the microphone to avoid distorting your voice.
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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #5 on: December 28, 2018, 22:06:47
hi @bear bard , that is a great performance, singing on a bass live   

nice songwriting, great bass playing, super performance   ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #6 on: January 07, 2019, 03:35:38
I enjoyed your song and performance video @bear bard . The bass riff suits the song and lyrics held my interest.
Hats off to you for sharing your demo- I look forward to where you`ll take the use of that live loop tech.

Robert


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Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #7 on: January 08, 2019, 03:45:04
Thanks for the supportive comments robertkc, Dutchbeat, Mora Amaro La Loba, Leanard Scaper. I appreciate the feedback.

I have a few more videos on my youtube channel if you're interested.

https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCrttNFbH6eF6gYicBg9MKEQ?view_as=subscriber


Re: Original Song "Radical Blues"
Reply #8 on: January 09, 2019, 22:02:43
A very different idea
I find it very interesting
Congratulations  ::thumb::
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