• Perfect - poem-song
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Perfect - poem-song
on: March 23, 2019, 20:12:07
« Last Edit: March 23, 2019, 20:16:33 by Rachel_D »
Hi kitcheners! :)

I wrote a new song this week and would like to see what you think about it. (I literary squeezed this one in (I should have been doing a myriad of other things) but at times, when you are flooded with work, you really feel the 'need' to stop and create something short/quick just to get back to your own self).

...This time I tried to get a better recording of the voice and adjusted it to make it sound more clear than my latest two uploads.... so here goes - there's an audio version on soundcloud and a lyric video on youtube:

Soundcloud link: https://soundcloud.com/rachel_debattista/perfect

Link to lyric video:


Lyrics:

Perfect memories inside a state of mind,
Perfect whistle in the dark and you're by my side
Time stands still every time I think of you
Bit by bit I am left with my own tunes

But everywhere I go,
you know I'll take you with me.
And anywhere I am, there's you too.
There's no time that we're apart,
because you miss me
and I'll be there inside this space for you

In a perfect life
that's what I'll do.

Have a great weekend!
Rachel
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https://.com/rachel_debattista


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Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #1 on: March 23, 2019, 20:55:10
i always like your songs, i think your vocal melodies and singing are very good @Rachel_D

and once again, this is one is very nice  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: in my ears  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
me, myself, and Pie


Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #2 on: March 23, 2019, 23:32:58
Like the voice, and how in a world of vocalising excess you keep it simple.
I listened to your other song before this, that basic piano chord backing in both songs is holding you back. You've got a lot going for you.
To be honest I found the videos off putting, the desktop wallpaper images  did not fit with the message this song was giving me, and in the last song a good lyric got sanitised by generic images.
Good stuff though.


Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #3 on: March 24, 2019, 01:29:37
@Rachel_D A A very uncomplicated song format, but with a delicate lyric and a moving voice. I like this very much.
Pleudoniem: composer; bass guitarist; guitarist; singer; drummer; tap-guitarist - o, and yes... erm- a bit of keys. Open for collabs.
SoundCloud Page: https://soundcloud.com/pleudoniem


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Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #4 on: March 24, 2019, 09:33:58
Love your lovely small songs.
And this one is no exception.
Looove it!
What more can I say? @Rachel_D
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #5 on: March 26, 2019, 09:08:11
Like a thief in the night I came back for another listen @Rachel_D.

A perfect poem song it is.
With a perfect title.
Love it.
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #6 on: March 27, 2019, 11:43:18
Nice simple song.
And quite effective.

I wish it was a little longer.
Sorry to hear you don't have time to get more things done.

Thanks for sharing.


Re: Perfect - poem-song
Reply #7 on: March 27, 2019, 13:23:39
@Rachel_D  love the chord progressions, and the lyrics are great!  I think it's the start of a great song!
Do what makes your heart sing :)



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