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Rainy Days WIP
on: January 17, 2015, 00:58:14
So..... i've struggled with this one.. I wrote it first with a completely different set of chords and melody... and then I recorded it with a click/drumbeat and REALLY struggled with that (my 2015 New Year's Resolution!)... and tonight I just recorded it simply with my zoom into Garageband... so being a very rough take, the quality is a bit crap.. and please forgive my guitar playing...

To note:
* Is the chorus too long with too many vocal notes over the Rainy Days etc?
* My guitar playing is a bit iffy... particularly in the M8.. so apologies for that...
* Is the M8 lyrically a bit "meh"?

And I guess all comments/advice/suggestions welcome - even if it's to say Spend No More Time On THIS!

Lyrics:

Rainy Days

The last time I saw you, we were dripping with rain
You leaned to kiss me before turning away
I stood in silence as I watched you go
Didn't ask why you were leaving
I didn't want to know.

Chorus:
Rainy Days X 4
Stop the memories from slipping away
Rainy days
Stop the memories from slipping away...

I look in the puddles and I see your face
Rain hits my tongue and my memories race
You said you wanted nothing just for me to care
But in a way that was beyond me, a love I couldn't share

Chorus

You opened my mind and you healed my soul
I was licking my wounds and I was out of control
You stood me up straight and you showed me the way
If you hadn't fallen we could have stayed that way

M8
I hope that you're happy wherever you are
That love surrounds you and your giving heart
I know we're not suited whatever you think
But I'm still glad I found you
I'm still glad I found you - You were my missing link

Chorus

https://soundcloud.com/monnodb/rainy-days_wip_rough



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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #1 on: January 17, 2015, 12:09:54
Hi Zedd, i say: GREAT!!!!
yes, very good!
a nice happy sad song, i like the chorus very much, also like the m8

this could be a nice upbeat, yet, somewhat sad song, a comforting song, very nice, and great voice again!
i would like to work on this, i think i might be better at proposing additions for this than for "Picture of you"

anyway, karma for sharing this song

watch out...... ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D
Incoming Karma........
me, myself, and Pie


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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #2 on: January 17, 2015, 16:19:46
Hey Thanks DB... I would LOVE for you to apply your skills to one of my songs.. So that would be a Yes Please from me.. Let me know what you would need (this is very raw and simple 2-tracks and they're not very good so I could rerecord).. and again I am making no assumptions that you will get to it - I know you have a lot of projects ongoing.

Thanks for listening and for the feedback. Always appreciated..

Z


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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #3 on: January 17, 2015, 18:34:15
it sounds very great, no need to rerecord at all
for me
and yes, i would love to work on this
if you let me


it is really good

so please send the guitar and vocal tracks to my e-mail
ok?



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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #4 on: January 17, 2015, 19:10:26
and yes!!! (listening again)

this is very good   :o :o :o, in my opinion


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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #5 on: January 17, 2015, 19:16:14
Hey there DB! Thanks a mill for your feedback....

I'll get them over to you by email..

I will admit to really looking forward to hearing what you do if it works out (again I make no assumptions so no pressure  :) :)!!). Thanks so much for taking the time to listen and hopefully to play with it..  :) :)

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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #6 on: January 18, 2015, 12:45:40
Thanks Zedd, i recieved the tracks and will give it a go!


Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #7 on: January 18, 2015, 16:31:59
Nice work, Zedd!

I think the standing in the rain is not just literally, but also a great metaphor.
Beautiful, romantic, yet heartbreaking.
Your voice reminds me a bit of Bonnie Raitt. Is anyone else getting that comparison? (It's meant as a compliment btw, she's one of the greats!)

S
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Re: Rainy Days WIP
Reply #8 on: January 18, 2015, 21:24:44
Thanks so much SL for your feedback. So glad you like the rain idea.. and the thrust of the song..

And eh, oh, wow to the comparison.... I'll take that any day of the week.. Now of course I don't see it but I'm so happy with the compliment... Thank you SO much!!!

Appreciate very much your taking the time to listen and give comments....

And thanks DB - really looking forward to hearing what you do with it... :) :)

Z



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