• Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
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Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
on: October 30, 2018, 23:14:40
Hi all!

This is my entry in the same lyrics challenge:  :pompom:

https://soundcloud.com/user-2898025/two-hearts-in-the-snow-lyrics-by-michael-a-duffy

Many thanks to @MichaelA  for the great words and inspiring lyrics.  ::heart:: ::heart::

 ::Rachel::

/Micke

Two Hearts in the Snow

Verse 1: Asus5, Am, D, D add on G,
When I looked out of my winter window
G on third fret, Bsus5, A#sus5, Am
A shroud of snow covered the ground
Asus5, Am, D, D add on G,
And did I dream a robin by my winter window
G on third fret, Bsus5,
Sang you were back in town?
Am on 5, D on 5 x2
Twelve months now, since you went away
Feel it like yesterday

Chorus 1:
G on third fret
I love you
Bsus5
Iíll write it in the snow D on 5, C# on 4,
C on 3
And draw a big heart around it
D on 5
Just so youíll know

F, D on 5 and then some kind of climb back towards Asus5

Verse 2:
So I walked out into the frozen landscape
To the fields where weíd once go
Where Iíd etch those words and carve my snowy heart shape
If you passed by, Iím sure youíd know
Iíd seize back time thatís slipped away
Oh if I could, this day

Chorus 2:
I love you
Iíll write it in the snow
And draw a big heart around it
Just so youíll know

Bridge: F, Esus5, Asus5, D
The snow was falling
Felt like calling
To Heaven with a prayer
But turning around
I was spellbound
You were kneeling there
Am on 5, D on 5 x2
Engraving in the Christmas snow
Ah, just to let me know

Chrorus 3:
I love you
You wrote it in the snow
And drew a big heart around it
Just so Iíd know

Chrorus 4:
I love you
I wrote it in the snow
And drew a big heart around it
Just so youíd know

Tag: Am# on 6, Esus5, Am# on 6, Esus5 - A major resolve.
Two hearts in the snow
Two hearts in the snow
Layerson (a.k.a. Mikael Lagersson)


Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #1 on: October 31, 2018, 00:18:29
@Layerson - really cool shuffle beat. Liking the strings too.  Clever chords : "D on 5, C# on 4, C on 3" - I'd need a picture to figure that out :-)
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #2 on: October 31, 2018, 06:26:52
Just the right amount of roughness (not quite polished qua timing) to make it easier to believe. A very 30-ish feel about it. Great American Songbook out the window and on the shelf the Great Kitchen Songbook. And here to stay.
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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #3 on: October 31, 2018, 13:02:50
Thanks @oorlab and @LePlongeur for the nice feedback  ::headphone::

And regarding the notation I really have no idea if itís thatís the way to write the chords or if itís correct according to the scales used, but itís in the ballpark I guess (...Iíll have to learn how someday, hopefully it gives someone a hint...however Iím sure itís at 130 bpm and in 6/8) ;)


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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #4 on: October 31, 2018, 15:33:37
I really like this one. The shuffling tempo works perfectly with the vocals. Very cool chord structure.
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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #5 on: October 31, 2018, 16:47:40
wow, yet another interpretation of the lyrics from @MichaelA

and how very nice and smooth this is  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: @Layerson
sounds great  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #6 on: October 31, 2018, 21:31:16
Very nice. The semi-theatrical delivery of the vocals reminds me of the Divine Comedy in this one.  Identifiable song structure too, that's important  to me. I'm a fan!


Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #7 on: October 31, 2018, 22:23:27
You can't beat a bit of crooning, my old man used to say. Mind you he said that about jellied eels, and tripe and onions aswell.
No I  like crooning, it's a lost art and needs to be liberated from the Museum of Forgotten Vocal Styles, and you  croon like the moon in June.
Very smooth.
Love that beat, that's a real toe tapper, and toes are meant to be tapped as my old man used to say  ;D
The vocal dips a bit in places and I lost the words.
The lyrics are a bit slushy and gooey for me but plenty of peeps like their slush and goo, wimmin in particular. So expect a surge of females joining your fan club . :)


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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #8 on: October 31, 2018, 22:31:11
Thanks @Leonard Scaper, @DanJames, @Dutchbeat  and @eric craptone ::headphone::

Iím in a steep learning curve right now and itís finally paying off a little, but I also realize how much there still is to learn... happy to get any and all kind reviews.  :)

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/Micke


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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #9 on: October 31, 2018, 23:13:59
Really charming interpretation @Layerson,  I could  tell I liked it as there's a whole load of lyrics to fit in there, but I was disappointed when it ended, wanting an encore.

The chorus, in particular, is gorgeous. I also liked your vocal overlays, unusual harmonies!

A great entry,  ::thumb::
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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #10 on: November 01, 2018, 08:34:41
Thanks @MichaelA  :D

It really means alot for me, getting good reviews from you, the author of the lyrics.  ::heart::

I'm sorry to disappoint you in that my version did'nt have an encore... if I was ever to work more with this song (...and I'd be happy to do that...) I could add that as well, but unfortunately I have too many songs to finish up at the moment...   :blackgrin: :bonk:

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/Micke


Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #11 on: November 01, 2018, 18:07:58
This is sooooo good! That chorus melody especially, and those harmonies are absolutely perfect. I can't stop listening to this entry!
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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #12 on: November 01, 2018, 18:17:56
Hi @Layerson ,

Wow! Gorgeous setting of these lyrics. Very intriguing rhythmic work.

Really like what you're doing with the built up vocals. And that "Ah" had a lot of emotional impact.

Great job, Micke  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #13 on: November 01, 2018, 20:12:35
@Layerson That swing style works so well on the chorus here, especially with the chord changes.
Very  good harmonies and some quirky percussion.
Yes, charming, as @MichaelA  says...and a real contender for the challenge honours!

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Re: Same Lyrics Challenge - Two Hearts In The Snow
Reply #14 on: November 01, 2018, 20:34:17
Wow guys, @TheMobRapper, @smajor and @robertkc::headphone::

There are so many good songwriters in this forum and I felt I was really out on a limb with this one, so Iíd never expect this many positive reviews...  ::heart:: ::heart::

 ::Rachel::
/Micke



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