• Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
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« Last Edit: July 11, 2019, 23:37:21 by Pleudoniem »
Hi guys, back again. Having had to struggle with a couple of things, some of them to do with hardware, but I think I've got around them now. See if you agree, and if you like the song.

I know that posting lyrics is usually appreciated, so here they are:

Scenarios

Parallel plays
Of showing and telling
Of guessing and spelling
Two games of chess

And the men on the stage
The knights and the saints
Have mysterious acts
That can still take you out

I’ve learnt you will be viewing this
Good luck to you, when you’re
Telling this, Forwarding this
To be quite miscomprehended

Scenarios

You think you’re watching Shakespeare
When in fact I’m playing Congreve
I’ve stopped to bother telling you
‘Cos you’d refuse to believe

When the lights go on
And the actors all enter
The black and white fields
The fact of the matter
is
Who is playing the set
Or just watching the shadows
Who is playing the dead
Like a shogi match

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Pleudoniem: composer; bass guitarist; guitarist; singer; drummer; tap-guitarist - o, and yes... erm- a bit of keys. Open for collabs.
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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #1 on: July 11, 2019, 22:24:51
I read the lyrics through once. Then I read them again slower. Then I took a deep breath and hit play.

The wonderfully cacophonous nature of the music sucked me right in...VERY cool production. Maybe the vocals could be up a little......I'm hearing a slight conflict between them and the bass guitar.

I need to listen again.........doing so right now.  :)

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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #2 on: July 11, 2019, 23:42:52
@Leonard Scaper Ok, thanks for the comments. I have made a couple of minor changes. Does it sound ok to you now?


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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #3 on: July 12, 2019, 01:19:52
In the studio now and listening on my best headphones. This mix really sounds fantastic. I love where the bass is and how the vocals present.

My first listen was in my office on earbuds. I do like that for critical placement listening on my own stuff.

Man...this sounds great. I need to stop typing and just listen.  :)


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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #4 on: July 12, 2019, 12:07:06
Love the song as a whole, love the lyrics too!
I am awaiting my new headphones since the old one broke down.
And the iPad ‘speakers’ tell me nothing.
I’ll have another spin when the phones are delivered.

But first impression (see! Almost American) is very nice.
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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #5 on: July 12, 2019, 19:24:04
@Pleudoniem   Oh yeah!! A cacophonous delight ( thanks for that ideal adjective @Leonard Scaper ). Though the sound is thoroughly modern, to my hearing this harkens back to when the prog. rock scene blew past boundaries ( thinking more Soft Machine than Genesis).
The production sounds very good and vocals sit where they should (on headphones).
My favourite part is actually the lyrics... its just cool to read through a song about something completely different and surprising... with no cliches to boot.
Very well done.

Robert


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Reply #6 on: July 12, 2019, 21:43:11
The spiral of creativity in this song is bursting with energy.  I'm sorry if I sound silly but I could see this as a movie soundtrack. Really cool. Your musicianship is awesome.
Do what makes your heart sing :)


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Reply #7 on: July 12, 2019, 22:36:43
@Kellyanneg Thank you for your compliment :) Naturally that makes me curious what kind of movie you had in mind.


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Reply #8 on: July 13, 2019, 01:04:52
Action. Like a Mission Impossible. ;D


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Reply #9 on: July 13, 2019, 01:57:55
Hi @Pleudoniem

I also read the lyrics first and my first thoughts were - it's a bit "out there" and very prog rock.

The song really grew on me. I like the guitar chords which have a discordant sound to them (to me at least) and it works really well.

The drums are little busy for my taste and at times seem to trample on the other parts but it could just be that they need to be lower in the mix?

All in all a very creative song.

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Reply #10 on: July 13, 2019, 02:21:27
« Last Edit: July 13, 2019, 14:53:23 by Pleudoniem »
@Jurgen True, they are not the most commonly used chords. There are a couple of maj11s in it, and m/maj11s, as well as the famous jimi b10 chord. I think it is nice to experiment with exotic chords a bit, I easily get bored with power chords.

You may be right about the drums. I had already replayed parts of them, because initially they were even busier. Your idea to lower them a bit in the mix may be a good idea, so that's what I've just done. See if it works better now.


Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #11 on: July 13, 2019, 14:43:02
Hi @Pleudoniem

Your song has a touch full of images that are diluted as they appear, I really liked this part
"I've learned this will be viewing this
Good luck to you, when you're
Telling this, Forwarding this
To be quite miscomprehended"

because it gives a meaning, as if it were the thread that has to be pulled to untangle the emotional knot
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: Scenarios - something that I needed to get down.
Reply #12 on: July 14, 2019, 02:49:13
@Mora Amaro La Loba Diluting images erm?... That is a very nice way to put it. I think that more or less refers to the shadowplay :) It is interesting to see how you make sense of the lyric.



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