shimmering gold

ah, I'm done with this one.

Feedback very welcome

I'll elaborate on the origins of the song if asked to.

I hope someone likes it.

link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/shimmering-gold


and lyrics


 

    shimmering gold


   a hard skin to crawl under
 when you can’t get with the joke
     ev’ryone is a foreigner
 they want to see you up in smoke
 burning, burning up in smoke
burning, burning down real slow

 friends looking on, vaguely confused
    cannot be expected to know
 black dog bites blindingly cruel
pain has the colours of shimmering gold
 burning, burning, shimmering gold
  burning, burning down real slow

  what of all the summer rain?

      laughter from another room
 all the windows and doors are closed
     no exit here, enter the fool
  one way mirror, a real live show
  burning, burning, shimmering gold
 burning, burning down real slow

  burning, burning, shimmering gold
    burning, burning down real slow
       shimmering gold

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            rightly.

Hola @rightly

Strange arrangement, cadence that takes you as it is armed (the chords of the strings)

The lyrics are overwhelming describing so many things and among others the absurdity of our reactions.

I love this line
 " laughter from another room"
it is quite a scene.

Stay safe

Mora

Hola @rightly

Strange arrangement, cadence that takes you as it is armed (the chords of the strings)

The lyrics are overwhelming describing so many things and among others the absurdity of our reactions.

I love this line
 " laughter from another room"
it is quite a scene.

Stay safe

Mora

Hi Mora.

from your comments I know you've an innate sensitivity. I'd say this is the main component of intelligence.
you know what I'm talking about cuz you've been there. God bless you.

Rightly

I like this @rightly . Mildly disturbing, in a very good way. Your voice reminds me of Jim Morrison, also a compliment.

Wonderful jazzy cabaret-esque song, @GaryHynes  -  reminds me of certain songs of Dutch band Nits.
e.g. https://soundcloud.com/nitsofficial/dead-rat-ball


if you are still thinking of re-editing - I would take out a bit of drums where there is singing. In the instrumental parts the drum fit well.
I am curious for the origin of the song - how did you write it, what was the working order?
Cheers

This song is.........all over the place.....and wonderfully so......perfectly anchored by the vocals.

Lyrically intriguing, it captured me in its Intricately complex web.

Classic Rightly!

I've read the lyrics and listened again and I've liked them again.


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Hi Mora.

....God bless you.

Rightly
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Thank you @rightly
the same to you, stay safe.
Mora