• Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
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Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
on: March 11, 2021, 11:05:21
Hi everybody,
my name is Jonas,  I'm 24 years old and I love to write songs. I recently recorded some demos, one of them is called "Since You've Been Gone". Its an acoustic song with just piano and my voice.
I'm new to this forum, but I would really appreciate all kinds of feedback/advice/criticism to the song:)

Here is the link:     https://soundcloud.com/user-626675643/since-youve-been-gone

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Re: Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
Reply #1 on: March 11, 2021, 20:06:45
Sounds great @Jonas-Songwriter !
It has a fantastic 70s.vibe to it.
I do have a few remarks however.
Would you be so kind to write an introduction in the me section? Wd like to get to know you just a little bit better.
And asking for remarks is very safe in da Kitchen. Because we are a caring community. But youll get far better help if you make clear what type of help you are looking for. So help with mixing, check of the lyrics, extra instruments. Do you look for collaborations? You get what I mean.

Im glad you joined us and I wish you a lot of luck and inspiration.
I like your first song and I say: keep them coming!
Kind regards, Gus

Re: Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
Reply #2 on: March 11, 2021, 20:36:58
I thought it was a lovely song, one of those songs that lends itself well to just the singer and a single acoustic instrument.

I can make two comments:
-at the start your voice doesn't come through as well as it does at the end. I would try up the volume of the vocal in a few spots.
-I can't help but wonder if there is room for some more creative imagery around the lyrics. The theme came through well, but the lyrics didn't quite tug on the heart strings as much as the song deserves them to. Just a thought.

Great song though, enjoyed it.

Re: Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
Reply #3 on: March 12, 2021, 07:40:03
That song really stands on its own with just the piano and voice. I love the idea and  I think it has a good message. I think it will resonate with a lot of people.

The only thing I can think of is maybe put a short instrumental part before the last verse to make the listener anticipate the end. 

Re: Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
Reply #4 on: March 12, 2021, 15:33:28
This is a wonderful raw performance of a well written song. It would work as an excellent demo for a full blown studio production.
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Re: Since You've Been Gone- Feedback
Reply #5 on: March 19, 2021, 22:25:46
@Jonas-Songwriter ,

Cool song,  great idea to present a song tha doesn't dwell on the hurt of heartbreak at the end of a relationship. In taking this stance, you've created tremendous sadness.  Great vocal performance and a fine song. Well done.


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