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So Bright
on: August 01, 2015, 15:14:17
« Last Edit: August 01, 2015, 15:21:24 by bastianseling »
Hi there, thanks for the invitation to your forum. Just wanted to post a new song of mine which is called "So Bright" ...

https://soundcloud.com/bastianseling/so-bright-previsit

... which is part of the Previsit EP ...

https://soundcloud.com/bastianseling/sets/previsit-ep

Here are the lyrics, in case someone feels inspired reading it ...

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Bastian Seling - So Bright

Another line in story made thy crown
Another fight of worries, there's nothing left to say

You said "I look, I care"
'Cause I couldn't see you anywhere
See the stairs are calling
with a guidance to the ground

Another time of hurry made thy ground
Another guide in journey, there's nothing left to stay

You said "I look, I care"
'Cause I couldn't see you anywhere
See the stairs are calling
with a guidance to the ground

And they shine so bright
When they walked out in morning sun
And they shine so bright
When they walked out in morning sun

Another kind of sorry made thy sound
Another line in story, there is nothing left to stray

You said "I look, I care"
'Cause I couldn't see you anywhere
See the stairs are calling
with a guidance to the ground

And they shine so bright
When they walked out in morning sun
And they shine so bright
When they walked out in morning sun

Look how they shine so bright
when they walked out in morning sun
Look how they shine so bright
when they walked out in morning sun

Thank you for your feedback, and, feel free to connect with me on SoundCloud.

Cheers,
Bastian

https://soundcloud.com/bastianseling


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Re: So Bright
Reply #1 on: August 01, 2015, 15:32:51
Hi Bastian, thanks for joining our songwritingforum. Your music is very cool, originla percussion, a great open atmosphere, and a very good vocal (is that you singing?)
and a great driving bass!
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Re: So Bright
Reply #2 on: August 01, 2015, 15:39:53
Hi,

I really like the instrumental track (especially at the end, it's amazing <3 ) and the quality of vocals. Getting deeper into the song - The melody is not really that catchy, it doesn't really fall into your memory. It would be hard for anyone to sing or hum it if asked to repeat. I also feel that lyrics are too repetitive and reused, they also don't hold much content. I have this feeling that these are some cheesy lines made of beautiful words with no message at all. It could work well as a kind of imaginary song where you just imagine things while listening to it though.

Sorry if it's harsh, I am just being honest, and I really belong to this "kind of old pop team" so what I am looking for in songs is a catchy melody and meaningful & real lyrics. And I really can't find these in this song of yours. But don't worry. It's just my opinion. I am sure there are people who will love this track. It's just a matter of taste. Everyone has a different one.

Keep up the good work! :)
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Re: So Bright
Reply #3 on: August 01, 2015, 20:52:09
Hello Bastian and welcome to the Kitchen.Karma for finding the way.
Your song is great.It's some kind of carefully growing up. Well sung and very good played instruments.Production is very good too.Nothing to criticize here. Well done. ;)
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