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Song about my recent heartbreak
on: October 06, 2019, 18:35:25
Hey All,
Here's a song about my recent heartbreak I've been going through.  I can't tell you how therapeutic the whole process of songwriting has been for me, from writing lyrics to chords to editing and channeling my mind and efforts into something positive.  I tried to make the song upbeat despite the subject matter. 

https://soundcloud.com/dmsound-2/new-heart

Lyrics:

Finally spilled my heart today, but she pushed back and I got turned away, oh no, it's not how it was supposed to go
Thinking about all the things in my head, remembering all those words you said
But she left nothing to interpretation, and now her guilt is no consolation, oh I got to move on
Thinking back to yesterday, when her smile said my name
Change, it happened too fast
Was banking on false premises, can you please tell me what this is?
When you, walked away from me
Should've seen it coming, that she wouldn't let my love in
And now the time only swallows my pain, and she's so smug when she says my name, oh it weighs on me
Her sweet gaze only tells lies, and I've been snakebit too many times, oh, I want a new heart
Oh when she does, I don't, when I do, she doesn't
Oh when she does, I don't, when I do, she doesn't
Well I guess I already knew somehow, still so hard when I found out
But I know I'm in a different place now, because I don't feel the same when you're around
Here she comes, here she comes, taunting me
And her sweet gaze only tells lies, and I've been snakebit too many times



Re: Song about my recent heartbreak
Reply #1 on: October 07, 2019, 00:33:54
I think you have good potential with this one. I can hear it with a complete production. Needs bass, drums, keyboard... your guitar should be way back in the mix. Nice job on changing up the melody toward the end. Good flow all the way through.


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Re: Song about my recent heartbreak
Reply #2 on: October 07, 2019, 04:38:40
@scojada91 thanks for listening and the suggestions!



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