• Take From Me \\ Original song
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Take From Me \\ Original song
on: May 19, 2018, 21:10:40


Here is my new song which sounds kinda catchy haha. I feel like my bass playing got quite listenable. Feel free to compliment, judge, whatever you want!

Lyrics

Im talking to sun cause Im crazy
The streets got blue but nothing is on the side of me
Im seeing you for all I ever wanted
You'll thank me too for all I never did

I'll give you what I want
And you'll take from me

This mildly burn
Cost of what you know about
We'll see it through on a corner of my house
When facing all of this without a hand
You'll see me and then I guess Ill see it through

I'll give you what I want
And you'll take from me


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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #1 on: May 19, 2018, 22:20:29
Very cool tune! You're right about the bass playing but that guitar is excellent as well with some very nice chord changes.

Wow.....REALLY nice lead work!! Very clean and tight.

It's a good song as well with vocals that work perfectly.

I might take just a little off that kick somewhere....maybe a cut around 2KHz......something along those lines.
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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #2 on: May 20, 2018, 10:28:54
Sweet guitar riff and sound and great clarity between the bass and the treble guitar. Nice vocal mood and memorable tune. If anything I thought it needed to build or have a bit more variety in some way, as it a little on the same level. But it's a very nice sustained low key mood you have created there.
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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #3 on: May 20, 2018, 22:44:44
Very cool!  :)
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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #4 on: May 21, 2018, 16:51:31
 ::e-guitar::
Very good mix of guitar parts rhythm and vocals !


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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #5 on: May 21, 2018, 17:22:55
Hi @introverse , that sounds good  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: indeed that bass line is very smooth and funky  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

nice vocal melody too, catchy like hell, yes

the complete drop backs in the music to the beat / handclap were a bit extreme in my mind, but for the rest....i think it is super  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #6 on: May 21, 2018, 18:15:10
I dig this..

It's got a cool relaxed vibe.  Nice mix as well


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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #7 on: May 30, 2018, 10:31:33
Nice production on this! very cool  and chill vibe. Digging it!


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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #8 on: May 31, 2018, 02:33:23
Really enjoyed this @Introverse77

I'm with @Leonard Scaper - the guitar sounds great - really clear and funky

That lead playing is very tasteful and restrained - impressive.

cheers


Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #9 on: June 01, 2018, 06:09:43
@Introverse77 this is a nice funky tune with a chill vibe...might I suggest adding some additional percussion such as a high hat or some up tempo symbol? Good work dude!


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Re: Take From Me \\ Original song
Reply #10 on: June 01, 2018, 20:43:53
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Hello everyone, I really want to thank you for such nice feedback, Im very happy you appreciate my work :)). Cheers to all!!



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