• The Boy I Left Behind
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The Boy I Left Behind
on: September 25, 2019, 23:47:55
Hello all,

It has been a while but I have been doing some writing and recording over the last few months and think I'll start sharing again!

I wrote this one v quickly and messed around with some effects on the backing vocals. Ignore the slight miss-rhythms if you can and as always my production quality is not great but I tried my best.

The Boy I left Behind:
https://soundcloud.com/alexxxiii/the-boy-i-left-behind

Baby he's good at love
and I know the things he does
so go run before he runs your river dry

Someday his luck will change
cause beauty like colour fades
and time will reveal his hollow heart

Baby you're your own biggest fan
a man can't speak your mind like you can

Baby I'm a grown woman now
and I can't believe it took me so long to realise it now
and he said that I wouldn't make it if I tried
well he's just the boy I left behind

Control is just so old
and these days we let it go
so baby create your life's desire

said darling, speak your voice
and know that it's all have a choice
so go live and be freed by your rules

know you're not outspoken cause you have a voice
and no your not entitled cause you have a choice

Baby I'm a grown woman now
and I can't believe it took me so long to realise it now
and he said that I wouldn't make it if I tried
well he's just the boy I left behind


Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #1 on: September 26, 2019, 09:10:44
@Alex - welcome back. BILB sounds wonderful. delicate guitar and soulful singing. Only comment I could offer, at 1 minute the volume jumps a bit. Thta could be easily fixed, and off course has nothing to do with songwriting per se.
I like the line 'Baby you're your own biggest fan
a man can't speak your mind like you can'

sounds like Trump...
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #2 on: September 26, 2019, 15:59:17
This is a fantastic song @Alex and a pretty good demo of it as well.  You definitely capture the essential feeling and swing and you sound SO good!

I would LOVE to hear this song as a full production but it's just really good to be hearing you do your thing again.

Great to have you back!!!!!
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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #3 on: September 28, 2019, 17:01:15
@Alex I recognise the same jump in volume that @oorlab notices. There are 2 in fact. He's right, this can easily be fixed.

As for the song. Nice and catchy. It has a bit of a Sheryl Crow flavour, and that can't possibly be bad. I quite enjoyed listening to it. Very good and matching vocal.
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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #4 on: September 28, 2019, 17:39:16
what  a nice song @Alex
catchy!!!!!!! i see @Pleudoniem  mentioned sheryl crow....i also have that association, the vocals and that rythm


sounds good  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::
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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #5 on: September 28, 2019, 19:53:42


I agree with   Dutchbeat

i picked up on that sheryl crow thing right away, but thats a good thing I think, and I think its a unique song.    Lane


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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #6 on: October 12, 2019, 21:37:00
+1 on the Sheryl references already mentioned. And there is something very odd happening at the 2 min (and 2.03 as well), like a cut&paste that went wrong?
Great song and great performance, really deserves a better production.
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My land's only borders lie around my heart


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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #7 on: October 15, 2019, 16:36:06
I simply love it to pieces.
Way better that the volume jumps than my left eye. (Chicken Shack among others).
Yes, I love it warts and all.
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Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #8 on: October 16, 2019, 18:19:01
Thank you @oorlab, @Pleudoniem and @Jambrains  for pointing out the sound jump - production is not my strength!

Thank you for your kind words on the song though. @Dutchbeat , @Jambrains and @Lane - love the Sheryl references, she is very much an influence of mine.  :)

Thank you @Leonard Scaper, nice to be back!  ::dj:: ::dj::



Re: The Boy I Left Behind
Reply #9 on: October 18, 2019, 12:59:54
@Alex - echoing the others, this is a great song and you have a lovely voice and delivery. Another SC fan here and I agree with the ref! Lovely stuff!



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