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the Ghost Life
on: April 04, 2019, 15:06:27
I wrote this maybe 20 years ago
Inspired by Cohen's song "the Butcher"

This is my most recent finished song.

Feedback would be welcome

the link:

https://soundcloud.com/rightly/the-ghost-life





The lyrics:



the ghost life


 
I wrote myself a message
'Told myself to chill out
There are too many things
I can do without
I stripped the mystery of its wonder
I took the golden prize
But I was too good the hunter
Now I've got the ghost life
 
Last night I fell asleep
With all my clothes on
Woke up real early
all the lights were on
If I had a place to go back to
Eh, what can you miss before itís gone?
Hear myself saying "thatís cool."
Nothing to no one
 
Eh hey to anywho
If you could only like me, I could love you
 
So I took my trouble dancing
It was a Saturday night
Nothing of consequence was happening
Music had no bite
Swallowed hole though when I went solo
Another number with a another name
That I really donít care to know
Iíve got my own pain
 
How strange is this ghost life?
Walking closer to buildings
With an eye on the streetlights
As the other checks for feelings
And once youíre in, there be no getting out
God knows how I try, I got some fight
I think you know what Iím talking about
Think you know exactly what itís like
 
Eh-hey to anywho
If you could only like me I could love you


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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #1 on: April 04, 2019, 16:45:24
I like what you write about and how you write it, Rightly. I also really like how you make that writing into music. You have such a unique style of writing and performing.

This is another good one from you.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #2 on: April 05, 2019, 00:50:25
Great oddpop song. Liking the drum sound a lot. The vocals have a nice David Byrne-feel to it.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #3 on: April 05, 2019, 15:15:23
@Rightly

The musical base is suggestive, it has a sensual movement like that of a snake that surrounds you in its sinuous form, a curious mix of styles that make it a suggestive track full of psychedelic images perhaps ...
The melody would sometimes ask me to solve it in some endings but it is also good that way, with your style so personal and difficult to imitate.
The lyrics are important, deep, I love this "Walking closer to buildings
With an eye on the streetlights
As the other checks for feelings"

, it's formidable.! ::thumb::
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #4 on: April 05, 2019, 18:20:00
@Rightly

The musical base is suggestive, it has a sensual movement like that of a snake that surrounds you in its sinuous form, a curious mix of styles that make it a suggestive track full of psychedelic images perhaps ...
The melody would sometimes ask me to solve it in some endings but it is also good that way, with your style so personal and difficult to imitate.
The lyrics are important, deep, I love this "Walking closer to buildings
With an eye on the streetlights
As the other checks for feelings"

, it's formidable.! ::thumb::

Thanks for commenting mora. You seem not only to express yourself but also to appreciate others in an artistic way.
I allow myself this too, only from time to time. ☺️


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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #5 on: April 08, 2019, 18:37:30
This is good work.

Intrigued by the title. Organ and vocals give it a Doors vibe, melody meanders more than I normally like. My two cents- I think if there was a way you could go crazy on the vocals here, shouting and rocking out it would take it from cool to a really impactful experience. Maybe something to work with in another project.


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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #6 on: April 08, 2019, 20:21:48
A definite doors vibe going on here .

Nice one @Rightly

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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #7 on: April 08, 2019, 21:17:56
yeah man @Rightly i dig this, pretty cool
fly away and find my peace of mind...
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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #8 on: April 09, 2019, 10:09:20
This is good work.

Intrigued by the title. Organ and vocals give it a Doors vibe, melody meanders more than I normally like. My two cents- I think if there was a way you could go crazy on the vocals here, shouting and rocking out it would take it from cool to a really impactful experience. Maybe something to work with in another project.

Thanks for the constructive criticism.
I see what our mean. I mean to look into this rigidity in my songs.
For some years I was only writing poetry where this righty seemed more important.
Ill change things up in the future. 


Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #9 on: April 09, 2019, 13:56:04
While listening to this music, my imagination flies to a strange world with dark cities half destroyed and invaded by rats.
It can be a kind of futuristic underground for a new world
Where real disasters would overcome the most cruel fiction
Etc etc.......
Therefore I have had a good time moving to other worlds that are too close.
An effective work
Congratulations  ::thumb::


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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #10 on: April 11, 2019, 13:27:04
While listening to this music, my imagination flies to a strange world with dark cities half destroyed and invaded by rats.
It can be a kind of futuristic underground for a new world
Where real disasters would overcome the most cruel fiction
Etc etc.......
Therefore I have had a good time moving to other worlds that are too close.
An effective work
Congratulations  ::thumb::

Thanks for your comments Marcus. Very creative.
I'm still a beginner with daws, I've a long long way to go and I'm really enjoying the trip so far.
All the best. Rightly.


Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #11 on: April 11, 2019, 14:40:19
Mysterious and psychedelic, it has Doors vibes,  although original and personal. We like the lyrics. Good work.
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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #12 on: April 13, 2019, 13:11:16
Mysterious and psychedelic, it has Doors vibes,  although original and personal. We like the lyrics. Good work.

Thanks black mirror

I wrote this about thirty dirty years ago. Lol.
They are autobiographical. At times a bit embarrassing. Somehow they were darker days. Was a fairly easy write musically.
I'm glad you liked it.


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Re: the Ghost Life
Reply #13 on: April 13, 2019, 17:14:24
This is good work.

Intrigued by the title. Organ and vocals give it a Doors vibe, melody meanders more than I normally like. My two cents- I think if there was a way you could go crazy on the vocals here, shouting and rocking out it would take it from cool to a really impactful experience. Maybe something to work with in another project.


Thanks for the constructive criticism.
I see what our mean. I mean to look into this rigidity in my songs.
For some years I was only writing poetry where this righty seemed more important.
Ill change things up in the future.

I apologize for the possibility that you may think I am contradicting you.
This is not my intention.
But it is possible that what you call your rigidity, is whatís really your thumb print.
It is what sets you apart. You seem to have some agility to change.

And I would like to suggest the Audi way.
They screw another screw in the carter and have us believe that the model as a whole is upgraded.
So I hope you make your changes as small as possible.
To be able to recognize someone is - in my book - one of the great virtues.
And you write in a way that fits that description.
Needless to say I like it a lot.
Kind regards, Gus



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