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The Lightshow -
on: May 16, 2022, 22:59:22
Hi folks, a song that took a long time to finish - but the words were written before current events and now mean more than ever.  Hope you enjoy.

This one is full of emotion and reflections. Appreciate your honest opinion.

The Lightshow: https://soundcloud.com/carldaviesbiz/the-lightshow?utm_source=clipboard&utm_medium=text&utm_campaign=social_sharing

LYRICS

Verse 1

in February 2014
we won the great fight of dignity
the fields were ploughed
skies were blue
 from rivers of freedom
cascaded truth

Verse 2

Now We walk the tightwalk of gravity
Our walls are thin
Just let us be
The lights are out
The streets are dim
The hoardes of darkness
Keep closing in

CHORUS
cus Everything blazes in the light show
Instantly tears you apart
Everyone’s golden in the deep glow
im still close to your hart
The silent streets in the daylight
are Broken solemn and blue
Im gripped, I’m scratching
for glimmers and traces of you

Verse 3
Our daughter Walked the strand tonight
She Cast her eyes on blazing lies
She said The war was lost
Our liberty gone
The union jack had fallen

English language forbidden
no reflections  on the thames
No black cabs or parliament
A city of strangers and military men

CHORUS

Verse 3 Repeats


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Re: The Lightshow -
Reply #1 on: May 17, 2022, 09:24:25
@CarlDavies  - sounds very inviting and pro. The lyrics, I must admit, were a bit puzzling to me. I wonder - what happened in february 2014?

This line gives a suggestion of a story: "Our daughter Walked the strand tonight / She Cast her eyes on blazing lies"
Is the use of capital lettering on purpose?

Top songwriting! Recommended to @Mo @Pleudoniem  and @Bill   :pompom:
now heading over to wikipedia to find out what happened in february 2014

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Reply #2 on: May 17, 2022, 11:10:43
Hey @oorlab thanks for the encouragement and taking a listen + forwarding to others. Once you have worked out the 'February 14' reference, the name of the song and the rest of thelyrics will start to unlock....

It didn't feel right to handle the subject matter directly in the lyrics, mainly out of respect.

Carl

@CarlDavies  - sounds very inviting and pro. The lyrics, I must admit, were a bit puzzling to me. I wonder - what happened in february 2014?

This line gives a suggestion of a story: "Our daughter Walked the strand tonight / She Cast her eyes on blazing lies"
Is the use of capital lettering on purpose?

Top songwriting! Recommended to @Mo @Pleudoniem  and @Bill   :pompom:
now heading over to wikipedia to find out what happened in february 2014


Re: The Lightshow -
Reply #3 on: May 17, 2022, 20:35:05

Hola @CarlDavies

I liked the color of the sound softens the lyrics and its heavy  story.
It has been a very pleasant listening

Stay well
Mora
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Reply #4 on: May 17, 2022, 21:28:24
Thanks for the feedback Mora - its a heavy subject indeed...


Hola @CarlDavies

I liked the color of the sound softens the lyrics and its heavy  story.
It has been a very pleasant listening

Stay well
Mora


Re: The Lightshow -
Reply #5 on: May 21, 2022, 01:46:32
Definitely a song that demands attention. Your vocal delivery gives it a wonderful theatrical feel.

As a slight production critique I would have liked the vocal to be a bit more up front in the mix.
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Reply #6 on: May 21, 2022, 09:34:15
Hey @Leonard Scaper thanks for the feedback - I'll raise the vocals. I was in  a dash to get the song public - it took so long, I didn't want to keep holding it back. New mix coming shortly!

Carl


Re: The Lightshow -
Reply #7 on: May 21, 2022, 11:36:43
I'll raise the vocals.

One thing I sometimes do is send all of the other main instruments to a bus for some gentle compression while raising the vocal by just a couple of dBs.  I find that to be one interesting way to get the vocals to pop while still being tucked nicely in with the instruments. That might work well with this mix.