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the song without a heart
on: September 25, 2019, 16:29:44
« Last Edit: September 25, 2019, 20:49:36 by Rightly »
the song without a heart.

Hello folks!
I've been a way for a while... never mind. I haven't had much time to review posts (as I don't now, really.)
I couldn't resist putting up this song. My latest effort.

This is an old song of mine, re-done. I'd like to say it was a joy to produce but it was quite troublesome.
I've an acoustic version of this on S.C. that was always difficult to reproduce in a live setting.

Feedback very welcome. I hope you enjoy the song.

Link:

https://soundcloud.com/rightly/the-song-without-a-heart

Lyrics:

song without a heart

A friend is someone who can see you smiling
Even in  the  dark             
She's there, right there when y'need reminding
Of who you really are                                             
She guards y'against all that is phony
Alone with her is far from lonely
Mostly I'm a man of two minds                                             
one looks forward, n'one looks behind             
At times I don't truly see myself n' I
I just may want to go blind                                                       
I was hard n' warm, she was soft but cold
Thought it might be what i want, what th' ... did I know?

You're the song without a heart           
'Bout as useless as a deck of playing cards
                                               
so, what do you know?
 it's off to school we go

... and

She said, let's pretend like some mothers do   
Saw it on T.V. that's how I know it is true
Here I am now, one solitary fool                                                         
I would sit down but I cannot find an upturned stool       
If I could touch things, make them come alive         
If I sang to you would you show me what listening looks like?

You're the song without a heart
Like the peacocks tail in the dark                                                     
                                                   
so, what do you know?
it's off to work you go

You're the song to sing along without a heart

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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #1 on: September 25, 2019, 18:52:27
Hi @Rightly that is a mighty fine song and recoring you have here  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

just super in my opinion, vocal performance is stunning i think

intstrumenation too

awesome  :yes: :yes: :yes: :yes:
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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #2 on: September 25, 2019, 20:26:27
This song really needs a second listen (at least) to get deep enough into to come away feeling satisfied by it. I like that aspect a whole lot.

If I sang to you would you show me what listening looks like?

Yeah.

I also like your vocals in this one. Nice use of delays. The whole production works well for me.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #3 on: September 27, 2019, 19:29:55
I really liked the introduction, a lot, and the sound, very good.

Your lyrics are like the portrait of Dorian Gray, I do not know if you understand me, it has both faces but the terrible is terrible and hard poetry.

I think this style suits you very well @Rightly
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My Youtube channel:
https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCAaK7mFK7fUpf1E99I1Qtow
My Vimeo Songs of Thought channel:
https://vimeo.com/channels/moraamarolaloba
My Vimeo Downtempo channel:
https://vimeo.com/channels/moramarolalobadowntempo


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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #4 on: September 28, 2019, 12:30:48
« Last Edit: September 28, 2019, 16:18:05 by Rightly »
I really liked the introduction, a lot, and the sound, very good.

Your lyrics are like the portrait of Dorian Gray, I do not know if you understand me, it has both faces but the terrible is terrible and hard poetry.

I think this style suits you very well @Rightly
Hi @Mora Amaro La Loba
I'm not sure what you mean.
The poetry is terrible?


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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #5 on: September 28, 2019, 15:43:55
@Rightly  - sounding good, poetic lyrics indeed. In the intro there might be a bit too much bass, - but that resolves as soon the singing starts. Cool, Nick Cave comes to mind.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


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Reply #6 on: September 28, 2019, 16:23:00
@Rightly  - sounding good, poetic lyrics indeed. In the intro there might be a bit too much bass, - but that resolves as soon the singing starts. Cool, Nick Cave comes to mind.
Thanks for the feedback @oorlab
I mixed and composed for days with this one, I got ill.
After finishing it I of course started to hear things I should have seen to but I was exhausted.
I hope my workflow gets better.


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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #7 on: September 28, 2019, 19:32:10
nice song, if you are anything like me, you won`t be able to stop till you have all the versions finished you want.  good listen   Lane


Re: the song without a heart
Reply #8 on: September 29, 2019, 14:51:18

I'm not sure what you mean.
The poetry is terrible?

Hmmm I think your poetry is very strong, hard, heavy, real....
"Mostly I'm a man of two minds                                             
one looks forward, n'one looks behind             
At times I don't truly see myself n' I
I just may want to go blind" 


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Re: the song without a heart
Reply #9 on: October 01, 2019, 09:48:47

I'm not sure what you mean.
The poetry is terrible?

Hmmm I think your poetry is very strong, hard, heavy, real....
"Mostly I'm a man of two minds                                             
one looks forward, n'one looks behind             
At times I don't truly see myself n' I
I just may want to go blind"

@Mora Amaro La Loba
Lol. Mora you have an enviable sensitivity. Some lines at a glance may appear rather banal, the lines you quoted are actually the ones that almost made me discard this song because although it's good I was uncomfortable with it because of it's easy, priceless honesty.   

Thanks for your comments, you give me courage.



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