• The Songs Of Angels --- Music by Jeff Falk, my newest music writer
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Hello Everyone,

Another new song with another new music writer. Comments welcome.

https://soundcloud.com/smajor1/the-songs-of-angels/s-kCtkT


   The Songs Of Angels

Verse 1:
Few people even see me,
but I watch as they walk by.
I see the clothes they wear,
never look them in the eye.

Verse 2:
And what I hold inside me
none of them will ever know;
the world's too full of judgement
for me to ever show...

Chorus:
I could sing the songs of angels
I could play the music of my heart.
I could forge the true connections
that no earthly power,
no earthly power,
could ever tear apart.

Bridge:
They see my ragged clothing,
sneer at my dirty broken shoes
and make an instant judgement
without even knowing what they do.

Verse 3:
If I weren't sequestered in the street.
If I only had a name.
And was unburdened by defeat
and bent down under shame...

Chorus 2:
I could sing the songs of angels
I could play the music of my heart.
I could forge the true connections
that no earthly power,
no earthly power,
could ever tear apart.
I'm a lyricist seeking music writers to work with.


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What a well matched match @smajor, if you pardon me for murdering the language.
Already on for the second time.

If there is a critical remark, it must be that it is all very much well behaved. But maybe that's all in line with the guys' style. But if I forget about that, it's all lovingly done.
I love your lyrics!
Kind regards


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Hi @smajor - this is great! Love the lyric, very impactful and beautifully represented Stan, perhaps my favourite of yours that I have read.. and I think that @jbfalken did a fine job with the music and performance...


Great to hear you're getting so much music out!


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Good bit of work @smajor ... and bonus points for working 'sequestered' into a lyric. Not one you often hear in a song ;-)
It's an interesting musical style choice to go with your lyrics but I think it works well. I was imaging something much darker from your lyric, more melancholy perhaps ?

The groove works particularly well against the "... but I watch as they walk by" and the overall message.
I can just picture well-healed people, busy with somewhere to go, walking past the subject in the song without a second glance. 

Good bit of work on this @jbfalken ... and welcome to the Kitchen :-)

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"Love and Life is all about connections"


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This really sounds excellent. I like the message and I love the groove that @jbfalken gave it.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

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Good to hear another one of your songs come to life @smajor

Some really nice vocals on this @jbfalken and the funky instrumentation is great.

cheers


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Hi @LePlongeur , @Zedd, @MrBouzouki , @Leonard Scaper , @Jurgen

Thank you all for your supportive comments.

I know what you mean MrBouzouki when you say "It's an interesting musical style choice to go with your lyrics". It took a few plays before I decided, as you did, that it works. I think the fact that the narrator, despite his poverty, is basically aspirational... is seeking something better... is what connects with the drive of the music.

Later,
Stan


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Hi @LePlongeur@Zedd@MrBouzouki@Leonard Scaper@Jurgen

Jeff and I are planning to release this song within the next month or so and we could use some help... please share which artist or artists this recording reminds you of. We're trying to figure out who our target audience might be.

Thanks in advance.

Later,
Stan