• The Writing's on the Wall
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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #15 on: January 11, 2016, 20:33:13
Hello there!

Very lovely song you have put together. I like the melody and the chords you have choosed, really good. The lyrics are also very well written.

Great job, lovely stuff :)

With love
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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #16 on: January 12, 2016, 00:12:24
fischermans- Thanks for taking the time to comment! Thanks for complimenting my lyrics and my guitar playing...means a lot!

Dutchbeat- I must re-record the vocal track and the harmony track soon so and you will be very welcome to try and mix them together if you so wish! There is absolutely no pressure to do so though...entirely up to you! :) Thanks for getting back to me on this!

Marti- Thanks very much! Your words are so kind and I really appreciate you taking the time to write them. Thanks in particular for calling this work 'great songwriting'...that is just incredible for me to read...trust me! :)

Beppe- Wow, thanks for such positive words! Thanks for the big compliment on the lyrics! Thanks so much! :)



Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #17 on: February 08, 2016, 19:44:55
Hi guys,

Just to let you know that I have posted a second version of this song in the first post of this thread! It is my first ever attempt of doing any sort of harmony in a song...so please be kind!

Thanks,
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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #18 on: February 09, 2016, 21:58:51
Hi,

Lots of comments on this great song and the version I've listened to does have the harmony at the end.

Really good lyrics and I like your singing and accompaniment.

My only thought on this is that maybe the ending could have built a bit more just so it's a different from the rest of the song, especially as the last chorus repeats. Possibly the first part of the chorus, louder or more aggressive and then finish with the softer version of the chorus. A minor point though and just an opinion of course.

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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #19 on: February 10, 2016, 16:26:44
Hi,

Very nice tune. Like the overall downbeat mood.
I'd be tempted to raise the level of the harmonies. They sound good, they deserve to be a bit louder.

Digger


Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #20 on: February 15, 2016, 21:24:42
Hi Digger,

Thanks for your kind words on the harmonies...I have them low because Im brand new to harmonies and I suppose I was afraid of them distracting from the main melody! I must mess around with them again! Thanks :)


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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #21 on: February 16, 2016, 19:22:56
and i listened again,

this a lovely song in my opinion, a very nice experience listening to this for sure

really good, i think, Cruiser
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Re: The Writing's on the Wall
Reply #22 on: February 19, 2016, 18:35:05
Thanks Dutchbeat...your kind words, as always, are much appreciated!



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