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there to disappear
on: May 10, 2019, 00:47:09
aahnutha break up song.
forgive me

there was eventually a happy ending

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https://soundcloud.com/rightly/there-to-disappear

lyrics:


           there to disappear
 

   with muted senses, searching so as not find
     
shuffling our feet as, as all our precious clocks un-

  winding and wily, what be your business here?

    if not to remind me of who I am..., and then

        and there to disappear, and then

             and there to disappear


guarded ignorance, wonder doesn't have a name

 curtsy t' indiff'rence as nights follow days again

no time for distance, let me ring a bell in your ear

 all out of patience, turn another page..., and then

         and there to disappear, and then

               and there to disappear


     all these demands, this fuss for affection

   who needs love when we've got protection? and then

      and there to disappear, and then

        and there to disappear




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Re: there to disappear
Reply #1 on: May 10, 2019, 09:22:25
Sorry that you need a break up for such a nice song.
I would appreciate it very much if you could explain how you build (built?) up the backing.
Sounds like a gruelling patchwork kind of thing at first sight/listen.

More in general, I still wonder why we need to write about break ups when there are a thousand other things we (and I do) write about.
This is no dis at you, more a sort of plea to all Kitcheners.

But @Rightly I like this one very much!
Kind regards, Gus


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Re: there to disappear
Reply #2 on: May 10, 2019, 11:28:47
Sorry that you need a break up for such a nice song.
I would appreciate it very much if you could explain how you build (built?) up the backing.
Sounds like a gruelling patchwork kind of thing at first sight/listen.

More in general, I still wonder why we need to write about break ups when there are a thousand other things we (and I do) write about.
This is no dis at you, more a sort of plea to all Kitcheners.

But @Rightly I like this one very much!


Kind regards, Gus

Good morning and thanks for such an interesting response Gus.

When I first played this acoustically and live, mostly to friends I was a tad perplexed with the relatively lukewarm response.
This song has depth, meaning and playfulness, it's a rare one for me in that it is personal in a vulnerable way.
I've other nice songs that didn't take a break up to write.

Writing it was a lot of work and accompanied by much uncertainty.
Some conservative types were discouraging and were irritated that I should venture into Vsts.
I maintained my course, I was thoroughly inspired at what possibilities cubase and native instruments could present me with.
I'd been struggling for years as a solo artist with only my acoustic rhythm guitar and voice, lol...
Both of which were challengingly unique and not always pleasant.
I'm no master, I do what I can, the only way I can, n by golly, did I get some flak from the lesser mortals.
I can't really explain, offhand how I put the backing together.
Certain sounds amazed me, I tried to apply them where appropriate, also with an ear to letting those sounds to some extent define the song.
I probably overdid it but I had a blast.
A lot of trial and error. Singing without a guitar was frighteningly disarming.

Generally, concerning break up songs.

I understand where you're coming from but over thirty years of composing, having written over two hundred songs, I can recall only three break up songs.
Looking back I'd say that a good few of them have been written when I'm trying to come to terms with something usually unpleasant and disturbing.
I can understand folks wanting to resonate with broken hearts, also such an audience is often more receptive.
At times I consider writing for this audience a bit of a sucker punch and this is not my style.
I do see it necessary for a writer on occaision to deal with this predicament and is therefore ready to invest the time and energy it takes to restore some sort of balance. If writing such a song works then that might be the way to go.
There are too many break up songs about generally and if they haven't got something else going for them I won't listen, I'll actively avoid them.

Really glad you liked this one! 

All the best! Rightly.



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Re: there to disappear
Reply #3 on: May 10, 2019, 21:35:28
Do I like it? You can say that again @Rightly !
Itís almost Van Gogh-ish. From up close itís a lot of blobs and  what have you, but from a short distance it all makes a lot of sense.
I think it brilliantly doctored into an effective backing. Beautiful backing. If you think this is English at all.

Do as many break up thingies as you want, but without the heartbreak.
And the best part of breaking up is in the making up, as the Ronettes so to-the-point sang.

Canít wait to hear the next one.
About anything at all.
In a textual way, I mean.
Keep it up!
Kind regards, Gus



Re: there to disappear
Reply #4 on: May 18, 2019, 03:21:33
I like the adventure you went on to create the backing  @Rightly - it has the feel of an off kilter fairground .
The melody is also original  and adds a kind of wit to the  lyric... which is interesting sad, not maudlin.
Cool ending too :ok:

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Re: there to disappear
Reply #5 on: May 21, 2019, 16:50:41
Do I like it? You can say that again @Rightly !
Itís almost Van Gogh-ish. From up close itís a lot of blobs and  what have you, but from a short distance it all makes a lot of sense.
I think it brilliantly doctored into an effective backing. Beautiful backing. If you think this is English at all.

Do as many break up thingies as you want, but without the heartbreak.
And the best part of breaking up is in the making up, as the Ronettes so to-the-point sang.

Canít wait to hear the next one.
About anything at all.
In a textual way, I mean.
Keep it up!
Kind regards, Gus

Hi Gus.
They'll be no ronettes ending. lol.
I'm struggling with this new song. I'll get a backing singer involved.
I feel my mix n' performance will have to be exemplary if I'm to expect the singer to give her best.

I have been making progress. It's those final touches that are most frustrating.
It shouldn't take another month. Stay tuned.  :)