• Those We Won't See Again
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Those We Won't See Again
on: January 04, 2018, 14:42:15
Happy new year everyone!  Hope 2018 brings you excellent songwriting!
Would like to hear peoples' thoughts on this one.  It's a song I wrote after coming home from a big overseas holiday.  I jotted down some lyric ideas and then a few months later put together a rough demo.  It was one of those flashes of inspiration where a song came together really quickly once you started tracking.  I brought the pitch down a semitone to suit my voice better, then had this much better version recorded with my musical collaborator Glen.  He has come up with a nice bass track that brings the song to life, especially at the end, and also his usual nice harmonies.
The song is about the people we unfortunately don't get to spend enough time with.  It can be a lover who's left, a loved one who's died, or someone you sat next to on a plane for hours on end but never saw again.  I designed the song to be universal and suit the listener's own imagination.  It's an "album track", so not as catchy or radio friendly as my other tunes, but I'm still quite happy with it.

https://soundcloud.com/user-631944740/those-we-wont-see-again

THOSE WE WON'T SEE AGAIN

Do you ever lay awake
And think of how their smile
Turned the day a brighter shade?

Do you ever lay awake
And think of how they left
And you carried on with your day?

Don't forget their faces
They made your life feel better
Even if just for a little while

We need to always remember
Those we won't see again
We need to never forget about
Those we won't see again

Do you ever think about
When you were feeling down
They'd make bad thoughts go away?

Do you ever think about
What your life would be like
If they were still around today?

We need to always remember
Those we won't see again
We need to never forget about
Those we won't see again

'Cos they go their way and we go our way
Those we won't see again

For all the special people
There'll always be a place in our hearts
For all the special people
With whom you could only make a start

'Cos they go their way and we go our way
They go their way and we go our way
They go their way and we go our way
Those we won't see again


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Re: Those We Won't See Again
Reply #1 on: January 04, 2018, 15:34:18
Very nice. I like how it builds and then keeps developing. Definitely kicks into gear nicely after the first minute.

Excellent message.

Nice bass and harmonies and I like that long epic outro.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

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Re: Those We Won't See Again
Reply #2 on: January 04, 2018, 21:22:28
Great vox, esp the harmonies! Nice build up as it progress. Found the bass line a bit busy at first when the bass came in but no so later on. Having it just following the kick up to "we need.." would have worked better imo but just a matter of taste of course. The synth/string works really well I must say and overall the mix sound great. A little more bottom and less edge on the bass guitar would have suited my taste better, but hey, that's just me  :)
Me like, well done!

Btw, is the acoustic recorded from the built-in mick?
Let man's petty nations tear themselves apart
My land's only borders lie around my heart


Re: Those We Won't See Again
Reply #3 on: January 05, 2018, 17:39:20
Hi @Chargedvt

have not heared your stuff before but I like this one... (followed you on Soundcloud), nice harmonies. Very well produced. Only minor thing is that I find the synth around 2 min a bit "cheesy". Maybe you can find another sound?

Best,

Fabian


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Re: Those We Won't See Again
Reply #4 on: January 06, 2018, 08:04:02
Thanks for the feedback, guys!
@Jambrains the acoustic was recorded direct input. I use an acoustic/electric for my rhythm tracks.
@junemay cheers for the follow and your observations. Most of my songs are a few years old by the time I record them properly. But this one was put together and finished inside a month



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