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Too Late
on: August 16, 2018, 18:29:09
« Last Edit: September 09, 2018, 09:20:30 by realkevm »
Hello! Here's a brand new song I started writing this morning, in fact this is what I've cobbled together in ten minutes. Please let me know what you think 👍

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Re: New untitled song
Reply #1 on: August 16, 2018, 22:58:23
I think it's a good start with a pretty good hook chorus.
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Re: New untitled song
Reply #2 on: August 21, 2018, 11:36:29
Thank you Sir :)


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Re: New untitled song
Reply #3 on: August 29, 2018, 13:17:41
To update, i've done all the lyrics and arrangement, here are the lyrics and a newly recorded acoustic version. Please let me know what you think



I'm coming up 40
In this 30 limit
It's doing nothing for me
But at least i'm still in it
I'll lose my shoes
Now i've found my feet
If it's the same to you
I'll beat this disease

Chorus
I'll sing my songs
You sing them back to me
We sing along
Across the fields through the trees

2nd verse
The years are falling
Going by like the rain
Can#t you hear me calling
I'm going down again
And to stop the rot
I'll write you something new
Does it matter or not
If it sees me through



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Re: Too Late
Reply #4 on: September 09, 2018, 09:21:13
Here's another 'live' version, what do you think guys?


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Re: Too Late
Reply #5 on: September 21, 2019, 01:31:13
Hi guys, well i've had some management interest and as a part of that i've had to record a couple of demos to send along and this is one of them. In this newer version i'm in a different key, i'd love to hear what you think.

LYRICS
I'm coming up forty
In this thirty limit
It's doing nothing for me
But at least i'm still in it
And i'll choose my shoes
Now i've found my feet
Does it matter to you
If I beat this disease

I'll sing my songs
Sing them back to me
Sing a long
Across the field through the trees

The years are falling
Going by like the rain
Can't you hear me calling
I'm going down again
And to stop the rot
I'll write you something new
Does it matter or not
If it gets me through



Re: Too Late
Reply #6 on: September 22, 2019, 19:06:53
Ok, that`s a few versions to compare-my thoughts:
The key in the latest demo is a better fit for your voice to my hearing @realkevm .
I like the opening lines!
Lots of feeling in your vocal- a little stretched for the range on the chorus?
Not sure the doubled vocal works on the verses - might be better saved for the chorus.
The tempo change works at the end- slowing down to repeat your opening lines, but its not clear if the tempo changes going into v2- just feels like the song loses energy there.
Hope that helps ::e-guitar3::

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Re: Too Late
Reply #7 on: September 23, 2019, 02:23:26
Hey @realkevm  .. I want you to do well when you pitch your demo.
Have you already sent it?
If you haven't yet then I have a recommendation for you to try. If you have then good show & good fortune!  :)
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Re: Too Late
Reply #8 on: September 25, 2019, 22:13:19
Hey @realkevm  .. I want you to do well when you pitch your demo.
Have you already sent it?
If you haven't yet then I have a recommendation for you to try. If you have then good show & good fortune!  :)
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I have already sent my friend



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