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too much will make you poor
on: September 19, 2021, 17:19:55
I wrote this many years ago
this is a new production of it

I wonder if it's too much?

feedback would be thrilling


https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/too-much-will-make-you-poor-1


too much will make you poor


better getting bigger
cannot be stopped
deafened by the thunder
or is that just the way he talks?
if there ain't no room for you to wander
then he loves you not

do you speak the language,
have you a hand to hold?
thinking you can stand it,
am I to go down alone?
the falling that it takes until I'm landed
is no longer than rope

the falling that it takes until I'm landed is no longer than rope

seems like ev'rytime you turn about another joker more
are you the joker in the crowd asking well what for?
too much, too much
too much will make you poor

the hardest work of all,
it is the worst paid
still y' might have washed your hands
before showing your face
it's good for your health they say
 but it leaves a bad taste

so I told it to the mountain,
 his most royal highness
n' to the silhouettes of false kings,
they were shouting in the darkness
let it be said that greater men
have died for less

let it be said that greater men have died for less

patience is a virtue, you cannot be too sure
you'll know it when I hurt you, you ain't no child no more
too much, too much
too much will make you poor

too much, too much
too much will make you poor

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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #1 on: September 19, 2021, 19:26:16
@rightly,

Lovely rhythmic intro which you capitalise on to write an endearing verse pattern.  It's interesting to hear the drum styles that we all favour.  Your choice for example is much different to a pattern that I might write or choose.  It all adds however to the lovely individual style of writing that you present.  I love the hey, hey parts and the accompanying piano too.  Highly individual work and as always, so welcome!

Paul


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #2 on: September 20, 2021, 00:58:49
rightly . . . I'm liking this one a lot !
Your style is unique, and refreshing here . . . and musically it has some very interesting lyrical and rhythmic elements. (Loving the piano and strings interplay)  Ha' . . . your background vocalists only had to learn 1 word  3x . . . "hey, hey, hey" works surprisingly well in this one. You say it's an idea you revisited from the past . . . glad you did . . . I always remember Leonardo Da Vinci said "Art is never finished, only abandoned"


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #3 on: September 22, 2021, 17:29:23
rightly . . . I'm liking this one a lot !
Your style is unique, and refreshing here . . . and musically it has some very interesting lyrical and rhythmic elements. (Loving the piano and strings interplay)  Ha' . . . your background vocalists only had to learn 1 word  3x . . . "hey, hey, hey" works surprisingly well in this one. You say it's an idea you revisited from the past . . . glad you did . . . I always remember Leonardo Da Vinci said "Art is never finished, only abandoned"

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thanks fellas
and especially for the quote
I've always known this
but it's good to hear some established artist blurting it out! lol!

Those spoken parts on the track are too ill defined either I'll get rid of them or try to sharpen them up

All the best! R.


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #4 on: September 23, 2021, 22:05:32

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hi y'might be interested to hear the original recording

it's ancient

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/2-much-will-make-y-poor-acoustic/s-gL9xGxBzjS5


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #5 on: September 24, 2021, 03:05:41

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hi y'might be interested to hear the original recording

it's ancient

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/2-much-will-make-y-poor-acoustic/s-gL9xGxBzjS5
Nice, interesting to hear and compare the original version . . . like a transition from busker to producer, between the old and new, though I'm sure there were a "few" years in between ! It certainly gained some sophistication over the years. Good stuff rightly.


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #6 on: September 24, 2021, 08:40:34

@Cool Hand
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hi y'might be interested to hear the original recording

it's ancient

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/2-much-will-make-y-poor-acoustic/s-gL9xGxBzjS5
Nice, interesting to hear and compare the original version . . . like a transition from busker to producer, between the old and new, though I'm sure there were a "few" years in between ! It certainly gained some sophistication over the years. Good stuff rightly.

Lol

23 years between those 2 recordings.
The same amateur on both occasions


Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #7 on: September 26, 2021, 12:32:27
Still getting massive David Byrne vibes @rightly…..

Loving the rhythm of this one and the breakout part is really cool.

All your songs are very loose but there is a clever underpin holding it all together….

So creative mate  ::thumb::


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #8 on: September 26, 2021, 23:10:16
Great lyrics, wonderful songwriting. A bit of a Kinks / Ray Davies vibe. I'd lower the reverb on the main vocals a wee bit, and up the piano... just a mixing comment.
Cheers @rightly


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Re: too much will make you poor
Reply #9 on: September 27, 2021, 20:58:39
Great lyrics, wonderful songwriting. A bit of a Kinks / Ray Davies vibe. I'd lower the reverb on the main vocals a wee bit, and up the piano... just a mixing comment.
Cheers @rightly

Thanks I'll certainly look into that
The spoken parts certainly need sorting 



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