• Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
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Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
on: October 20, 2018, 00:55:14
« Last Edit: October 23, 2018, 21:24:00 by DanJames »
Here is my entry for the same lyrics challenge. Congrats again to @MichaelA for a superb set of lyrics.

Everything sounds a bit rough n ready at the mo, but i'll polish it up if I get the time before the deadline.

https://soundcloud.com/andomobot/two-hearts/s-TbhJu

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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #1 on: October 20, 2018, 09:11:30
Hey @DanJames , nice guitar playing and overall a very sweet interpretation of the lyrics. I thought the narrative style really suited you. All the vocal multi layering in the chorus is very effective and good melody, especially there, too.

The song sounded like a good sister song to your 'Shoreline Sunshine' tune, and you can now tell it's a Dan James song in about three seconds, which is great.

Very enjoyable entry. Plus your SC artwork made me smiile, very cute!
If you like novels with a musical theme, why not try 'Sixth Beatle - When Music Changed The World', easily found on Amazon and Google. It is amazing, although as the author I may be biased!


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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #2 on: October 20, 2018, 10:16:35
Nice!
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I'm going back to listen again.
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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #3 on: October 20, 2018, 10:20:07
sounding happy and uplifting. Guitars and vocals give a surprisingly complete  picture. My only tip would be - the last chord ends a bit sudden - maybe a coincidence, or with a purpose? Great harmonies @DanJames
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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #4 on: October 20, 2018, 20:56:15
Nice touch on this one.......the arrangement and the great harmonies make for a happy feeling.
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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #5 on: October 21, 2018, 19:43:26
@DanJames Breezy  as @oorlab commented. Fine harmonies add to the carefree feeling.
My introduction to your work  - I like your pop acoustic style on this :ok: :ok:

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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #6 on: October 22, 2018, 06:32:06
My suggestion on this one would be to brighten up the feel of the vocals a bit.   It seems like a happy song so let's match the track with the vocals.     It's a bit quiet and introspective.     Otherwise I really enjoyed listening to it.


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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #7 on: October 23, 2018, 07:46:36
@MichaelA thanks for the feedback. These lyrics really grew on me the more time I spent with them.
@LePlongeur thanks! that must be your shortest review ever!
@oorlab: thankas for the final chord feedback, I have changed it so should ring out longer now (just a bad cut n paste job before)
@Leonard Scaper @robertkc thanks  very much for listening.
@eblossman thanks very much for the feedback. Not quite sure what to do with it though. If you are saying brighten the vocal with the EQ, no probs. If you are saying re-record the whole vocal track er ..  no, there is no time! But as you say '"let's" maybe you are offering to do this for me?!


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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #8 on: October 23, 2018, 21:09:55
Sorry @DanJames!
Won't happen again!
Kind regards, Gus


Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #9 on: November 03, 2018, 12:46:20
Love it @DanJames !

It's a darn good thing I didn't listen to this before I made mine!!!!!! Really good melody - and you kind of made the melody work into your chorus structure by the "bah, bah, bahs" . Very nice soothing vocals and crystalline guitar passage.  :)

Hey did you draw the snowmen on your SC artwork yourself?  :lol:

Nice job!
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November Sound is based on the Mother, Father & Son musical trio of Melissa, Bill & Will. I'm the father so anything I post will have my wife singing and/or my son playing percussion.


Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #10 on: November 06, 2018, 12:08:04
A very upbeat interpretation of the ubiquitous lyric here mate. Carefree, catchy and chirpy.
If I may be so bold as to suggest you sound like a guy who thinks he can't sing and so sticks a few takes together to make a lead vocal.
Unfortunately it just masks all the inflections and dynamics of the voice, which is a shame.
Any way despite that, bags of energy , creative use of harmonies and a catchy chorus win the day


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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #11 on: November 06, 2018, 21:52:38
If I may be so bold as to suggest you sound like a guy who thinks he can't sing and so sticks a few takes together to make a lead vocal.
Unfortunately it just masks all the inflections and dynamics of the voice, which is a shame.

Haha spot on Crapmeister. My one take vocals just sound too weak and wobbly.


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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #12 on: November 09, 2018, 01:14:21
Hey @DanJames , thanks for joining the challenge and write yet another song based on @MichaelA 's words..

I've heard a couple of happy interpretations this evening listening to all entries. This one is no exception! I recognise your unique sound, immediately recognized a 'Dan James'..
Beautiful guitar play, nice instrumental without unnecessary currying it into a full band sound. The nice thing is that, because I've listened to some other tracks from your kitchen, I could easily remember this song as a full band (drummer, bass, 2 guitarists) version, but you didn't need that in this song. I was surprised when listening for the 2nd time that there was no 'band', just a guitar and a few vocals  ;) ;)
As for the vocals I love happy 'rappa-pa' kind of eh, what are they.. groups of syllables.. they work perfect in this song, got me into a happy vibe immediately.
My (really) only little 1 cent would be to review the backvox, there might be some (slightly) out of tune notes there. If used as an intended effect: coool! Then I didn't say anything..  ;)
All in all a lovely listen, thanks for joining and sharing!
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Re: Two Hearts In The Snow - Same Lyrics Challenge
Reply #13 on: November 15, 2018, 11:48:37
my snow is melting away when you sing  ::heart:: ::heart:: ::heart::
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