• Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
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Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
on: October 27, 2018, 03:24:43
Deadline looms  so I`ll post and have time for tweaking.
Soft, but hopefully not slushy  :-*

https://soundcloud.com/user-564042721/two-hearts-in-the-snow-lyrics-by-michael-duffy/s-HaFWl


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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #1 on: October 27, 2018, 08:59:04
Hi @robertkc , I enjoyed that interpretation, interesting choice of instruments and I particularly liked the slide guitar style thing. Some of the harmonies are quite haunting and this all builds to my favourite part - the multi layered vocal ending, which sounds lovely and is very catchy.

A worthwhile piece of work for you, definitely, and a very good entry!   ::thumb::
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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #2 on: October 27, 2018, 17:02:05
I like this version @robertkc

 ::OSMAN:: ::OSMAN:: ::OSMAN::

The instrumentation fits well in my opinion with the lyrics.  The James Bond type chord to end the song was unexpected.

I must admit that myself, and I think some others, have taken some liberties with the lyrics to fit the metre of the song they have constructed.
I think you have been accurate to the original lyrics but I wonder if you can take some small liberties so you can squeeze everything in on some of the wordier lines. To me the point of these challenges is to encourage great songwriting and having a bit of 'wriggle room' allows this to happen.



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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #3 on: October 27, 2018, 17:28:28
hi @robertkc , what a great entry for the we all write a song with the same lyrics songwriting challenge!!!

sounds good, super!, with hypnotic qualities in the music IMO. Pretty awesome!  ::thumb:: ::thumb::

i enjoy this challenge in which we all use the same lyrics from @MichaelA very much ....will great concept album with all these versions of the same lyrics on it
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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #4 on: October 27, 2018, 21:26:56
This is a very good version. I agree with @MrBouzouki that it is a challenge to fit some of those lines into a personalized musical format but you did well with it.

I know I cheated.  :) ;D :)
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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #5 on: October 28, 2018, 03:11:08
@MichaelA  Thanks for mentioning the vocal layers... more work than I usually do on harmonies and it was fun. The slide sound is a pedalsteel with echo & reverb.
The whole endeavour was interesting ( a first to write a melody for someone else`s lyrics) . You have inspired  about an album`s worth of very different songs- pretty cool concept these challenges.
@MrBouzouki  I snipped a few  words here and there and could maybe have paired some more (lord knows I`m very particular about my lyrics and would need to lighten up on that score before offering lyrics to all comers as @MichaelA  has done).
That piano roll at the end does have that Bond feel- maybe I`ll revisit that.
@Leonard Scaper  Thanks for your  :thumbsup:!

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #6 on: October 28, 2018, 08:57:07
Like it a lot.
Not even sure myself when the time comes to vote.
But you are aware of a deadline, so it must be some time soon.
Time enough to listen again.
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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #7 on: November 01, 2018, 20:03:08
@LePlongeur  Voting ballots should be available soon. :-X Thanks for giving my entry a listen.

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #8 on: November 01, 2018, 21:36:26
« Last Edit: November 01, 2018, 21:48:15 by eric craptone »
Bloody good song, mate. Really like this. You might not have the best voice but you use it very effective here, and infuse this with a lot of emotion.
Brought to mind the sort of thing Richard Harris would do when he done McArthur Park.
 Major points for the pedal steel, one of the most emotive instruments, and those layered vocals at the end create an effect what I can only describe as like heavy snow falling melodically across the landscape.
Nice one.


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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #9 on: November 01, 2018, 22:31:58
Lots of feelings going into this. Like the music in this version.  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #10 on: November 03, 2018, 13:25:56
Whoa @robertkc  this is really cool!

Love that layers of instruments and layers of vocals. It is somewhat complicated but also chill and cool. That chorus melody does just float to the earth like snow.

I really like the sound of that bass and that steel.

Good show!

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #11 on: November 03, 2018, 17:43:07
@eric craptone  I like the way you waxed eloquent & seasonal about my layered vocals... but Richard Harris, really?? ( A favourite of my mum as I recall).
@Layerson Thanks for  your listen and likes.
@Bill from November Sound  That`s positive feed back on what was a departure from my comfort zone.I like that jazzy bass so much  - and it took the melody into a less folky place than I started. Heading over to check out your entry now.

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #12 on: November 09, 2018, 00:54:19
« Last Edit: November 09, 2018, 00:57:32 by Mar T. »
Jeezz @robertkc nice singing style!! The way you draw words on the listening canvas, I love that! Beautiful instrumental.. Did you play the country sliding steel guitar yourself? (edit: I always try to comment before reading previous comments, just to make sure I'm not biassed, now I see you've already answered that question) Sounds so cool!
The harmonies sound spot on imo. Pleasure to listen to.

Few nitpicks after listening a few more times (just my 1 cent):
-I have the feeling the mix sounds a bit flat.. I tend to emphasized certain lows, some mids and some highs, so that might be very personal. But that's more on the production/mastering aspect. Not sure if anyone would agree with me on this aspect.
-The chord progressions in the end might get a bit complex/confusing (but repetitive at the same time), not sure if that pointer helps, just had to mention that and of course probably I'm wrong  ;)

Again, those are just nitpicks.. Without tweaking these aspects you've delivered a beautiful track anyway. Congrats!
I'm impressed, you'll do fine in the challenge I guess!
Cheers!
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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #13 on: November 09, 2018, 03:59:08
@Mar T.  I appreciate those listens and thoughtful comments .. especially as you were on a Two Hearts intensive !
I`ve been trying to improve my game on harmonies lately, so good to get the thumbs up on them.
That pedal steel is a chords track from Band In A Box which I lacedwith verb/echo.
You could be right on the overall sound being a bit flat. I`ve just started using Ozone 8 for mastering; it has a Tonal Balance component, which  is cool as it takes out the mud my earlier mixes suffered from, but  its something I need to put more learning time into, and probably listen back and forth to a reference track.

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Re: Two hearts In The Snow same lyrics challenge
Reply #14 on: November 09, 2018, 20:42:36
Yw @robertkc .. Ah Ozone 8, that's a great beast!! Careful not to overdo mastering though.. It is tempting..
I'd be happy to listen to a processed version and give some feedback in return, just tag me in, should you be interested..



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