• Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
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Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
on: September 15, 2019, 00:37:50
This Challenge will be memorable  for me `cos it got me writing about a very personal subject thats been a "don`t go there" for so long that my power to help or influence the person its about has probably passed... and all  I can do is write a song.

https://soundcloud.com/user-564042721/unseenunknown   


Unseen Unknown Unheard


wanting to be seen
my lord made jewels green
to live in your eyes

carry silence with you
like a backpack
like those birds out the window
at school

one day turning cartwheels
then holding your breath
seeing faces from the bottom
of a pool

we called him Uncle Amazing
he looked like Steve McQueen
all candy card tricks
sleight of hand

games behind closed doors
the cost to keep mum
on the tip of your tongue
like a brand

you slip through the seam
between worlds
unseen unknown
unheard

needing to be known
the heart outgrows bone
beats beyond your walls

he sent a singing postcard
playing we`ll meet again
in the fort we made
to be safe

there`s a ghost at the table
girl without edges
where is my sister
you replaced

slip back through the seam
between worlds
be seen be known
be heard

longing to be heard
the beginnings of words
no secret can contain
no secret can contain


© Robert Cordrey Aug. 2019


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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #1 on: September 15, 2019, 16:03:17
Wow, what a beautiful track @robertkc  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::
and what an awesome entry for the "Ghost in the Kitchen"-songwriting challenge   ::thumb:: ::thumb::

(btw...joinig that songwriting challenge is still possible, here: https://www.songwriter-forum-kitchen.com/forum/challenges/18/ghost-in-the-kitchen-songwriting-challenge-official-thread/5648/ )

this song sounds beautiful  ::headphone::...and i have a feeling that the story behind it is a sad one  :no:

Great songwriting  :thumbsup:
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #2 on: September 15, 2019, 20:09:31
Hola @robertkc

Your lyrics have impressed me... So many subtle and gestural details are guessed there...

I loved the atmosphere in general, especially the intro,  you have managed to give your song a special sensibility. Congratulations.  You are a strong rival.....
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #3 on: September 15, 2019, 21:22:55
This song is just so good @robertkc . The lyrics really demand close listening and your vocal presentation is just perfect. Man, the way you sing "between worlds"......SERIOUSLY good vocals.

I love the way that guitar keeps the song on a perfect track to let everything else develop around it.

This is a fantastic challenge entry
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #4 on: September 16, 2019, 03:07:45
Thanks for the positive comments @Dutchbeat .Yes, the story is a sad one... and the Challenge sounded like so much fun I`m a  bit :-[ that I came up with about the most serious song I`ve written in response. Looking forward to jollier entries!

@Mora Amaro La Loba Glad you liked the opening - a first try at acapella.Thanks for listening.

That`s one of my favourite guitar tracks @Leonard Scaper - nicely muted. I appreciate your comments on the  vocals and lyrics-  the intention was to be clear the song was about abuse ... and then try to bring something that transcends that disturbing subject.

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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #5 on: September 18, 2019, 01:27:06
I read the words first @robertkc and they certainly tell what I imagine is a very sad story.

It has a real folk sound to it, especially the beginning. The vocals sound great. The song went in a different direction to what I was anticipating but not in a bad way, just different.

The chunky guitar is great - holds it all together.

Great entry for the comp

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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #6 on: September 18, 2019, 23:53:15
@robertkc  - wonderful this https://soundcloud.com/user-564042721/unseenunknown  - perfect intro, and delicious strings.
recommending https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/How_Music_Works "How music works", book by David Byrne.


Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #7 on: September 20, 2019, 17:30:26
@robertkc Poetry put to music. I like that. A very folk-like type of song that contains a lot of mystery. I am trying to make sense of it, but I am still puzzling.

Ok, I admit, I often do that to my listeners too, so I understand. And it's about ghosts, so mystery is in-built.
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #8 on: September 21, 2019, 01:06:10
Tremendous production, I wish I had the know how to add an orchestra etc.
I love how the piano flows.


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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #9 on: September 22, 2019, 18:24:54
Thanks very much for your listens and comments @Jurgen , @oorlab , @Pleudoniem , @realkevm and please excuse the slow response- I`ve found a little down time necessary after getting this song out.

Robert


Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #10 on: September 30, 2019, 22:00:14
WONDERFUL!  ::heart:: ::heart:: ::heart::
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #11 on: September 30, 2019, 23:18:58
@robertkc magic mate! majestic!
fly away and find my peace of mind...
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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #12 on: October 01, 2019, 23:02:22
lovely song, expertly crafted with a delicious mix of emotion-laden vocals, rhythmic acoustic guitar and nuanced strings. The production is spot on too. Good luck for this challenge!


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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #13 on: October 04, 2019, 14:59:27
C'mon @robertkc ... give us a break won't ya!  :praise:

I don't know where to begin... Lovely arrangement. The vocals are splendid. I guess you play every instrument and record? If so, I'm even more impressed. Not forgetting: The song is awesome (my vocabulary isn't ... awesome is not a strong enough word...) and the lyrics are really good.

This is another masterpiece by you, well thought trough, excellently recorded ... again, I'm just glad to be in the same challenge.  :dance:

Congrats to a really beatiful song, can't find anything  negative to say about it... and I've heard it plenty of times now, love it!  ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb:: (And, there are alot of great entries in this challenge... wow.)

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Re: Unseen Unknown Unheard ( Ghost Song Challenge)
Reply #14 on: October 07, 2019, 03:21:08
Thanks to  @Liéschevre , @man of simple pleasures , @DanJames & @Layerson  for your listens and comments.
@Layerson  I see all your listens and send out an extra big Thank You :praise: for that and your very kind comments... and to set the record straight; I`m no multi instrumentalist and only the voices are mine on this track. Without  the  sotware/home studio wonders available to songwriters now you`d be listening to this and my other efforts in a far less pretty package.

Robert



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