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We were So Young
on: June 10, 2017, 21:01:01
Hey all!

Been working on a track. For the moment titled "We Were So Young". It's a pop song about falling in love but too young for it to last forever. Would love any thoughts or feedback. (Note: there is a glitch in the first few seconds...for some reason it keeps happening when I upload to SoundCloud).

Thanks!
Micky

https://soundcloud.com/micky-shiloah/we-were-so-young-6-8-low-2/s-WtfP8


Lyrics:

It was during that summer I figured out
How to be myself
It was you it was me
I was done with pretty much
everyone else

We'd go driving out late at night
A couple drinks in our system and the moonlight

But we were so young
We were too young
To be in love
We had the world at our fingertips
our head in the clouds
you let me do all the things that I was never allowed to
but we were too young

I was finally free I felt my heart pound
When I tasted your lips as you touched mine
It was everything I'd ever dreamed about
We were face to face the whole damn night
Face to face the whole damn night

And then you looked at me in the eyes
I knew that this was gonna be the first time

But we were so young
We were too young
To be in love
You gave me your body and I gave you mine
You told me you loved me at just the right time
But we were too young

We were like the sun we were down and out
But we were something beautiful
So beautiful
We were like the sun we were down and out
We were something so beautiful
something so beautiful
(repeat)

We were like the sun but the sun goes down
But I'll always remember

We were driving out late at night
I knew that I was yours and that you were mine

But we were so young
We were too young
To be in love
We had the world at our fingertips
our head in the clouds
you let me do all the things that I was never allowed to
but we were so young
We were too young
to be in love
you gave me your body and i gave you mine
I told you i loved you at just the right time
but we were so young
we were so young
we were too young


Re: We were So Young
Reply #1 on: June 10, 2017, 21:06:45
This is so great. I absolutely love this song . Great job done. The lyrics are so recognizable as most people probably recognize and understand what it's all about. Your vocals are really good too.


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #2 on: June 10, 2017, 21:42:46
This is so great. I absolutely love this song . Great job done. The lyrics are so recognizable as most people probably recognize and understand what it's all about. Your vocals are really good too.

Wow thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed :)

Micky


Re: We were So Young
Reply #3 on: June 11, 2017, 01:23:05
I love how this whole song sounds and moves.......excellent job. Your vocals are just perfect and the percussion really drives things hard.

Excellent lyrics as well. I told you I loved you at just the right time

I have to say, though, that after listening a few times I'm still struggling a bit with the very beginning. You come into things kind of abruptly and then it takes a few measures to get down to the groove. There's a little editing hiccup at :04...that may be what I'm hearing.

This is such a good tune...take another look at that intro.
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Re: We were So Young
Reply #4 on: June 11, 2017, 04:27:01
I love how this whole song sounds and moves.......excellent job. Your vocals are just perfect and the percussion really drives things hard.

Excellent lyrics as well. I told you I loved you at just the right time

I have to say, though, that after listening a few times I'm still struggling a bit with the very beginning. You come into things kind of abruptly and then it takes a few measures to get down to the groove. There's a little editing hiccup at :04...that may be what I'm hearing.

This is such a good tune...take another look at that intro.

Thank you so much! And yes SoundCloud has been causing that glitch for some reason no matter how many times I upload it it's always there. It's not in the actual recording.

Thank you again!!

Micky


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #5 on: June 11, 2017, 08:24:02
Hey Micky,

It sounds different but I thought that the music production was a little one dimensional and lacked contrast: it sounded more like a rough sketch to me.

The vocals were great as usual, the arrangement needs more contrast in my opinion.

All the best,

Ken
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Re: We were So Young
Reply #6 on: June 11, 2017, 18:51:42
Hi Mickey @Mutrins

that was a pleasure again to listen to your new track  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

and this one has huge summer hit potential, great job @Mutrins  ::dj:: ::dj:: ::dj:: ::dj:: 8) 8) 8) 8) ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

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Re: We were So Young
Reply #7 on: June 11, 2017, 21:59:16
Gorgeous voice @Mutrins


Very smooth production I must say...


Really enjoyed the listen..


Re the glitch, try uploading as a new track and see if it's there - that's rather odd that SC is causing that prob...


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #8 on: June 12, 2017, 02:47:42
Great production! Really catchy, very colorful sounds. Love it! The chorus hits and makes you want to dance!
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Re: We were So Young
Reply #9 on: June 12, 2017, 19:24:22
Nice song

Has a real pop feel, just made for the charts.

Excellent productions and cool vocals....including the backing vocals.



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Re: We were So Young
Reply #10 on: June 16, 2017, 12:03:40
Hey Micky,

It sounds different but I thought that the music production was a little one dimensional and lacked contrast: it sounded more like a rough sketch to me.

The vocals were great as usual, the arrangement needs more contrast in my opinion.

All the best,

Ken

Thanks, Ken! Yea I need to work on it a bit more. It's more of a demo at this point, but i've been doing some other types of arrangements on it and trying to see what sticks. Need to spend some good time on it.

Thank you for the feedback!
Micky


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #11 on: June 16, 2017, 12:04:21
Hi Mickey @Mutrins

that was a pleasure again to listen to your new track  ::headphone:: ::headphone:: ::headphone::

and this one has huge summer hit potential, great job @Mutrins  ::dj:: ::dj:: ::dj:: ::dj:: 8) 8) 8) 8) ::thumb:: ::thumb:: ::thumb::

Wow, Thank you!!! Always appreciate your feedback @Dutchbeat  :) :)


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #12 on: June 16, 2017, 12:05:07
Gorgeous voice @Mutrins


Very smooth production I must say...


Really enjoyed the listen..


Re the glitch, try uploading as a new track and see if it's there - that's rather odd that SC is causing that prob...

Thank you so much!! Glad you enjoyed it.

I uploaded the track 5 times and it has the glitch every single time...so weird. I might just message LANDR and see what's up.

Micky


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #13 on: June 16, 2017, 12:05:32
Great production! Really catchy, very colorful sounds. Love it! The chorus hits and makes you want to dance!

Woo hoo! Thank you :)


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Re: We were So Young
Reply #14 on: June 16, 2017, 12:06:06
Nice song

Has a real pop feel, just made for the charts.

Excellent productions and cool vocals....including the backing vocals.



Sandeep

Thank you!! Glad you enjoyed. Would love to get it on the charts !! ;)

Micky



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