• What is sadness?
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What is sadness?
on: September 14, 2019, 15:09:07
« Last Edit: September 14, 2019, 18:38:06 by Mora Amaro La Loba »
Autumn is coming and everything is prepared to fall asleep in the wake of the beat of time, and being sensitive to that change, I leave this video-poem-song with poetic and abstract lyrics, daughters of the light that the rain gives




What is sadness
what is sadness
maybe the heart that becomes a bell
vibrating with the depth
that a tear can have

what is sadness
what is sadness
a point of light
trembling in the eyes

a colour surrounding you
made of grey
and salt visages
made of grey
and salt visages

what is sadness

maybe
the last breath
of a rose to the hand
that pulls it out
of the earth
where its parfum
was a science

a wave that becomes a thought
making you float
in a void
where the bitter
gives sensations
of a soft way of dying
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
My Youtube channel:
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My Vimeo Songs of Thought channel:
https://vimeo.com/channels/moraamarolaloba
My Vimeo Downtempo channel:
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Re: What is sadness? (I need your help)
Reply #1 on: September 14, 2019, 16:03:34
I couldn't find anything wrong, Mora. I would define your sound as really elegant. At the same time I felt like being part of a thriller movie or something. Very interesting. Well done!


Re: What is sadness? (I need your help)
Reply #2 on: September 14, 2019, 17:51:46
I couldn't find anything wrong, Mora. I would define your sound as really elegant. At the same time I felt like being part of a thriller movie or something. Very interesting. Well done!

Muchas gracias @alcapone_dudu

Thank you very much for commenting. It has made me happy that there are no mistakes.
Now I can share the video on YouTube.


Re: What is sadness?
Reply #3 on: September 14, 2019, 18:58:46
Lovely poem set to delicate and atmospheric music @Mora Amaro La Loba :

beautiful lines:

What is sadness
what is sadness
maybe the heart that becomes a bell
vibrating with the depth
that a tear can have

Autumn is forever for poets!
I was just thinking of some rhythm coming in when the plucked strings did that perfectly.
The discordant background sounds are a nice foil to the gentle mood, which goes well with the wind and rain I`m walking in today. ::heart::

Robert






Re: What is sadness?
Reply #4 on: September 17, 2019, 22:15:48

...The discordant background sounds are a nice foil to the gentle mood, which goes well with the wind and rain I`m walking in today. ::heart::

Robert

Hi @robertkc

Today it doesn't rain here but it left enough water for all kinds of comments, good and bad. Poets and writers... sure the rain is their Muse !!
Thank you very much, you are very kind.


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Re: What is sadness?
Reply #5 on: September 18, 2019, 00:55:30
I enjoyed this @Mora Amaro La Loba - the piano creates a sense of anticipation and foreboding.

The almost spoken words work well of that sparse music.

The one small change to the words I would suggest is that rather than

the last breath
of a rose to the hand

it could be
the last scent
of a rose on the hand

btw - it's Spring here in Australia and we're getting some much needed rain. Looks like non-stop for a few days here in Sydney and other places. The rain does create something special, especially here in Australia as we don't get much and everything changes when it's wet and we hear the rain falling.

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Re: What is sadness?
Reply #6 on: September 18, 2019, 14:19:15

The one small change to the words I would suggest is that rather than

the last breath
of a rose to the hand

it could be
the last scent
of a rose on the hand


Hola @Jurgen

Gracias, thank you!! wow, it is a great suggestion, really, I will think about it, maybe I can re-do the video on Vimeo...

You have the spring coming there, here it's Autumn, both have the rain we need so much for living and dreaming.


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Re: What is sadness?
Reply #7 on: September 18, 2019, 21:14:51
Well, @Mora Amaro La Loba once again you have produced a piece that has taken me someplace I have not been. You have a real knack for that kind of transcendental connection through your music.

Pretty cool vocal effect on this line:

a wave that becomes a thought
making you float
in a void
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Re: What is sadness?
Reply #8 on: September 22, 2019, 15:35:44
Well, @Mora Amaro La Loba once again you have produced a piece that has taken me someplace I have not been. You have a real knack for that kind of transcendental connection through your music.

Pretty cool vocal effect on this line:

a wave that becomes a thought
making you float
in a void



Thank you @Leonard Scaper  As you can see I love void!!


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Re: What is sadness?
Reply #9 on: October 01, 2019, 03:29:50
These lyrics are deep. They really paint a picture. Great work


Re: What is sadness?
Reply #10 on: October 05, 2019, 17:05:58
These lyrics are deep. They really paint a picture. Great work

Hola @Neal

Thank you, I consider talking is a way of painting.



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