what's wrong with you?

What's wrong with you?

A good friend wrote this song with her special somebody in mind.
I realised how good it was and set about producing and eventually performing it.

I'd like any kind of feedback.

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/whats-wrong-with-you-1

what's wrong with you?


so many ways to slip inside
let down the guards n' cut all ties
cause confusion or find solutions
what's the master plan?

miles apart the sky is big n' blue
so many broken dreams to get to you
in the darkness, you're my witness
the light in my hands

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
we're dancing in the doldrums n' the distance lies between us
like an empty room

weary heart try as you might
do you still have the will to fight?
set the motion, drink the potion
lift the blanket ban

deep inside there is a mystery
everybody has a history
it's kind of hazy, a little crazy
it's written in the sand

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
the ocean waves are whispers n' the water holds a secret
like a song unsung

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
we're dancing in the shadows n' the distance lies between us
like an empty room
is it all just a dream, just a dream?



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rightly

Beautiful song! 

Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora

Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora

and happy new year to you mora

Hey I hope you don’t think this song is too slow. lol.
I think I’m generally quite slow myself. I’ll have to do some faster songs.

Stay safe mora

Hi @rightly ,

 I admit to have been reading the lyrics first before went to SC.

The many metaphors seem to me like a drifting self on the unsteady search for an unclear goal and unanswered questions. Therefore, I first had the impression it would be sure the intention to transport this with the lrics.

But your interpretation has then but rather something of a dreamy, slightly crazy, love song, which you have also done really well.
Anyway, in the end it's a nice mix of everything and I like both 

Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora

and happy new year to you mora

Hey I hope you don’t think this song is too slow. lol.
I think I’m generally quite slow myself. I’ll have to do some faster songs.

Stay safe mora

Pero @rightly

A mí me gustan las canciones lentas, I like slow songs, I told you as something that I like, not a criticism

Stay safe!!!

Mora

@rightly  you and your friend should be very proud of this 

Hey @rightly,

I enjoyed your song! I got a very "Pink Floyd" vibe, your vocals especially, which I really dig. I gave ya follow on SoundCloud so I'll be sure to listen to anything else you post moving forward! Sound quality of the recording was also good, which from bad experiences, is so crucial lol. Cheers!

This is classic Rightly....the way it moves and the way you weave your perfectly unique vocals through the music. I love the orchestral elements in this one.

This is classic Rightly....the way it moves and the way you weave your perfectly unique vocals through the music. I love the orchestral elements in this one.

thanks leonard!
I never know what to make of the word unique
I get it a lot... you've got good taste son I suppose unique is a good thing.
yes, I'm quite happy with this one, oh and my recent material
I need to keep up with this quality.