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what's wrong with you?
on: January 03, 2021, 18:22:30
What's wrong with you?

A good friend wrote this song with her special somebody in mind.
I realised how good it was and set about producing and eventually performing it.

I'd like any kind of feedback.

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/whats-wrong-with-you-1


what's wrong with you?


so many ways to slip inside
let down the guards n' cut all ties
cause confusion or find solutions
what's the master plan?

miles apart the sky is big n' blue
so many broken dreams to get to you
in the darkness, you're my witness
the light in my hands

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
we're dancing in the doldrums n' the distance lies between us
like an empty room

weary heart try as you might
do you still have the will to fight?
set the motion, drink the potion
lift the blanket ban

deep inside there is a mystery
everybody has a history
it's kind of hazy, a little crazy
it's written in the sand

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
the ocean waves are whispers n' the water holds a secret
like a song unsung

what's wrong with me?
what's wrong with you?
we're dancing in the shadows n' the distance lies between us
like an empty room
is it all just a dream, just a dream?



____________

rightly




Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #1 on: January 04, 2021, 07:13:24
Beautiful song!  ::heart:: ::heart:: ::heart::
Merry Christmas


Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #2 on: January 05, 2021, 13:19:09
Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #3 on: January 06, 2021, 20:31:00
Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora
and happy new year to you mora

Hey I hope you donít think this song is too slow. lol.
I think Iím generally quite slow myself. Iíll have to do some faster songs.

Stay safe mora



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Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #4 on: January 06, 2021, 21:24:45
Hi @rightly ,

 I admit to have been reading the lyrics first before went to SC.

The many metaphors seem to me like a drifting self on the unsteady search for an unclear goal and unanswered questions. Therefore, I first had the impression it would be sure the intention to transport this with the lrics.

But your interpretation has then but rather something of a dreamy, slightly crazy, love song, which you have also done really well.
Anyway, in the end it's a nice mix of everything and I like both  :D






Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #5 on: January 06, 2021, 21:27:08
Hola @rightly
Hi Rightly, happy new year, I hope...
The sonorous nostalgia of the song is put in the ears and the words become a slow and rhythmic dance, I loved the cello.

Stat safe

Mora
and happy new year to you mora

Hey I hope you donít think this song is too slow. lol.
I think Iím generally quite slow myself. Iíll have to do some faster songs.

Stay safe mora


Pero @rightly

A mŪ me gustan las canciones lentas, I like slow songs, I told you as something that I like, not a criticism ::Suzy::

Stay safe!!!

Mora


Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #6 on: January 07, 2021, 14:23:59
@rightly  you and your friend should be very proud of this 
Vince


Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #7 on: January 07, 2021, 18:12:57
Hey @rightly,

I enjoyed your song! I got a very "Pink Floyd" vibe, your vocals especially, which I really dig. I gave ya follow on SoundCloud so I'll be sure to listen to anything else you post moving forward! Sound quality of the recording was also good, which from bad experiences, is so crucial lol. Cheers!


Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #8 on: January 07, 2021, 21:01:12
This is classic Rightly....the way it moves and the way you weave your perfectly unique vocals through the music. I love the orchestral elements in this one.
"The main thing is to have a gutsy approach....but use your head." Julia Child

 "In a world of robotic conformity, the only originality left in music is the imperfections" Eric Craptone

"Special thanks to Steve Gleason for making me who I am today." Leonard Scaper

Lenny's Tunes: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_music.cfm?bandID=540680

https://soundcloud.com/vincentgleason


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Re: what's wrong with you?
Reply #9 on: January 11, 2021, 21:36:03
This is classic Rightly....the way it moves and the way you weave your perfectly unique vocals through the music. I love the orchestral elements in this one.

thanks leonard!
I never know what to make of the word unique
I get it a lot... you've got good taste son I suppose unique is a good thing.
yes, I'm quite happy with this one, oh and my recent material
I need to keep up with this quality.



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