• When do angels cry
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When do angels cry
on: September 30, 2019, 01:36:32
new thing i`m working on, I wrote this to inspire a person I know, "rise and try" this is still rough first take trying to sing it,  and I can`t stress enough I`m not a singer....lol  a few mistakes in lyric, I can walk and chew gum....I guess I can`t read and sing....lol

anyway tell me that you think, what you would change...all thoughts are welcome...




When do Angels cry
verse 1
Out there somewhere turning fifteen,
in this world that can be unforgiving.
sometimes it all goes wrong..still they try
there is hope... and that fear inside.

Chorus"
when do angels cry,
is it when We can`t go on,
when we`re giving in..
when hope and dreams are gone.

is it when we fall apart,
when there is no light..
or when we rise and try..
when do Angels cry..

verse 2
I know someone, a certain person
and they cry, alone at night
and getting by..they will make it ..
through it all..We hope they move on..

chorus
when do angels cry,
is it when We can`t go on,
when we`re giving in..
when hope and dreams are gone.

is it when we fall apart,
when there is no light..
or when we rise and try..
...when do Angels cry...

Bridge:
Life will get you down...
you get up and  give it all you got..

Chorus"
when do angels cry,
is it when We can`t go on,
when we`re giving in..
when hope and dreams move on.

is it when we fall apart,
when there is no light..
or when we rise and try..
when do Angels cry....


when do angels cry,
is it when We can`t go on,
when we`re giving in..
when hope and dreams are gone.

is it when we fall apart,
when there is no light..
or when we rise and try..
when do Angels cry....when do Angels cry.

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Re: When do angels cry
Reply #1 on: September 30, 2019, 16:28:28
I have to say....I LOVE how your voice works in this song....seriously authentic. This will be a very different song if you bring in another singer.

Good song here I think........classically structured. It's a classic story line as well. You even throw a key change in there....excellent! I really like how you take it out at the end. You do know how to structure a song to capture and hold a listener.

I would love to hear this one again when you get it past demo stage and into a tight production.
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Re: When do angels cry
Reply #2 on: September 30, 2019, 17:59:57


Hola @Lane!!!

Congratulations, your first effort works great!!
I think you have reached to find a fine structure very well developed.
Maybe the voice would need more level??? A little more?
I did not know that to live I had to die so many times
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Re: When do angels cry
Reply #3 on: October 01, 2019, 03:24:08
Nice work man, keep it up. The concept is great


Re: When do angels cry
Reply #4 on: October 01, 2019, 18:33:03
Its not easy to write an "angel song" ( there are so many - I know `cos I just wrote one myself!) with an original twist that also has heart.I think you succeeded admirably and in a very well structured, classic style reminiscent of Roy Orbison.
The modulation and bridge work well.
To my ears your voice has a kind of down home  real quality that fits the song... a bit of work on timing and processing and this is a keeper ::thumb::



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