• Wondering (where you are)
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Wondering (where you are)
on: March 20, 2016, 08:52:38
G'day everyone,

I've spent a very rainy day in Sydney (our long Summer seems to have ended) working on this track. I had the chorus and wrote some basic words to try and get song together. It's more of the style that I used to play many years ago and I enjoyed doing multiple guitar parts with effects etc.

Singing was a challenge of course but I did enjoy making this track, including the vocal parts.

https://soundcloud.com/jurgen-joarder/wondering-where-you-are-demo/s-SQDr3

Any feedback, suggestions etc. would be very welcome

Lyrics

Youíre out every evening
And Iím sitting here on my own
yes youíre out every evening
Leaving me waiting by my phone

but you donít call
and you donít ring
and Iím sitting here
just wondering
where you are?

The distance between us
too big to be measured in miles
itís the look you donít give me
we hardly talk
and those forced smiles

get home later and later
you say youíve got
a lot of work to do
the way youíre dressing has changed yeah
new perfume and those high heeled shoes

but you donít call
and you donít ring
and Iím sitting here
just wondering
where you are?


They say what you donít know
canít hurt or grieve you
well maybe to some extent
I believe that can be true

imagination runs wild
thinking where have you been
maybe I donít want to know
where you go or who youíve seen

but you donít call
and you donít ring
and Iím sitting here
just wondering
where you are?

cheers

Jurgen


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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #1 on: March 20, 2016, 10:06:01
Great stuff! Shades of Born To Be Wild and other classics from that era/genre, not so much that there is a problem in any way, just enough to make it sound true to the genre.
I dig the song and performance so my only complaint would be regarding the "sound" and/or production (but they are both very personal)
The way a few of the guitar sounded was not really my cup of tea (to "bassy" and "fuzzy") but tone is a very individual thing among guitarist  ::e-guitar3::
Some editing to cut out the amp hum when the guitar is not playing would help and the bass guitar is to low imho.
Personally I would have mixed this differently i.e bigger and bolder but once again that is up to personal preferences.

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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #2 on: March 20, 2016, 17:42:54
yep this cool and rocking in my opinion

great Jurgen!!!!!

what i am not too fond of is that: leaving me waiting by the Phone (lyrically)
it has been used a lot, and i think feels like the mobile Phone is not mobile

but for the rest: i love everything about this, that guitar gets better and better: ACE!!!!

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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #3 on: March 20, 2016, 21:05:41
thanks guys for listening and the feedback

@JB - I did get a bit carried away with the effects on this one. I use Garageband and as you probably know it has a whole stack of pedals that I was playing with.

re: the production, I don't really have much idea of production and just use a GB preset (rock in this case). But before I complete this song I'll look into this area and see what I can learn and come up with.

@DB - yes a very good point about "waiting by the phone" I did think maybe "staring at my phone" would be better and when I rework the track I'll change that. Some of the other words and phrasing need some work as well I think.

Karma to both of you for the great suggestions and feedback

cheers

Jurgen


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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #4 on: March 21, 2016, 02:23:52
Hey jurgen,

Ow yes, you're making progress!
Great observations from DB and Dutch, very useful! (Btw off JB, you're a 'gifted member' now!)
I'd try to give the 'space' in the production a close look... Think some guitars could use some
reverb, just a little, to glue them into 'space'.
I'm impressed by your vocal development, seriously! You're learning really fast!
Hope that the kitchen experience contributed a little to that development of course!
Well done, my friend.. KARMA!!

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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #5 on: March 21, 2016, 02:59:47
Thanks MM

Will keep trying with the singing and see where I end up. I enjoyed singing on this one. However, I do know that in the hands (or rather voice) of something else then I think I could help make some good songs.

But the kitchen is really helping me - good feedback from very knowledgeable people who are willing to give their time and ears to help others improve and produce the best music that they can.

cheers mate


Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #6 on: March 21, 2016, 12:26:10
Oh, I really liked this Jurgen!


Great energy to the guitar and drum tracks..


Love the melody and lyrics and the break!


I know you're very conscious of your vocal but I really think that it's improving as you continue to challenge yourself! So fair dues as we say here!


Great stuff... more I say! ;D ;D









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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #7 on: March 21, 2016, 16:34:22
Hi Jurgen,

Wow, very cool stuff! Your vocal is definitely emproving, just go and don't hesitate!  :D
I love the guitar playing (and am really jealous), but soundwise I agree with Jambrains, would be better when somewhat brighter in places. The long lasting tone in the solo at 2:30 is great. Sometimes so simple ideas are so effective...

Fantastic work, karma for you!

Cheers,
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Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #8 on: March 22, 2016, 00:44:17
« Last Edit: March 22, 2016, 04:19:06 by jurgen »
Thanks Zedd and Mark for you comments - especially on my vocals  :)

Mark - yes I think I need to play around with the guitar tone on the solos - I probably went a bit over the top on the fuzz!

And yes I really like a simple repetitive solo - I think I subconsciously picked that idea up from an old Squeeze song Pulling Muscles From a Shell - where the solo is just the same note repeated over and over - but it sounds great!

karma to you both for helping me with my vocals

cheers


Re: Wondering (where you are)
Reply #9 on: April 09, 2016, 16:15:25
Nice toe tapping tune



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