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Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
on: September 04, 2017, 20:24:53
Hey guys, sorry I haven't been active in a while, but I was travelin a bit during the summer.
So I wrote a sad song to get all my feelings out and I thought I'd share it with you.
Bless
https://soundcloud.com/kristijonas-valan-ius/once-again
Lyrics:

I think I'm done
I've lost and won
The battles of sorrow
But there's no tomorrow
For me
         
The muse is gone
The voice is done
And I'm but a shadow
Of what I used to be
Years ago     
 
A solace of mind
Is so hard to find
This personal hell
Holds me in
And I can't break the chains       
     
Down and under
With rain and thunder
I'll drown in madness
And blissful loathing

Once again
Lost in a maze
Of faces and names
That I'll forget tomorrow
While hugging the bottle
In the hole where I hide                 

I'll waste in my dreams
And roam the remains
Of the broken temple
That was my soul
I feel no control         

Ravaged and broken
The lost words were spoken
All walls are torn down
The vision and sound


Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #1 on: September 04, 2017, 21:08:47
diggin this, love the sound of that acoustic guitar!  ::thumb::
fly away and find my peace of mind...
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #2 on: September 05, 2017, 01:50:31
Nice one @Kristijonas - the acoustic sounds really good, bright and dynamic.

Some of the quieter vocals come across a little distant compared to the guitar but I think it works with the overall sound and the lyrics.

"Hugging the bottle" - that's a very evocative line.

The verse/bridge that starts "Down and under" is really well sung - your voice is very strong.

cheers




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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #3 on: September 05, 2017, 11:49:51
Thank you guys! I've been strugling with my voice lately and this song is partly about that...
So the kind words mean a lot.
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #4 on: September 05, 2017, 12:58:08
I love how your voice comes across in this song. When you sing that "Down and under..." part it is incredibly strong.

This entire song is really good exactly how you performed and captured it. I like how you faded out with that interesting instrumental bit. I can hear this as an extended jam tune.
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #5 on: September 05, 2017, 13:44:40
It's a great track @Kristijonas ... I'm actually quite jealous of the way you can just throw something down like that.  Your voice is good too, much better than mine that's for sure!  :D  Sounds a bit like the singer from Placebo, but the overall sound reminded me of Radiohead, if that makes sense.


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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #6 on: September 06, 2017, 00:05:04
Thanks, guys :)
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Yeah lately I've been feeling some older radiohead albums... So it might show :D


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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #7 on: September 06, 2017, 12:25:01
You've got a classic indie rock voice and you have a way of turning the melody to create those classic indie rock hooks too. Lot of potential here, I think you demonstrate some pretty good song-writing skills there, moody and full of angst. That verse hook reminds me of Snow Patrol of old, and they did pretty good melodies!
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #8 on: September 06, 2017, 20:20:45
 ::heart::
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #9 on: September 07, 2017, 23:49:29
@Kristijonas You are a true talent. This is SO strong. What a great song and what a great performance. Love your writing man.


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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #10 on: September 08, 2017, 02:20:18
I like the raw edge of this song. It doesn't want to be too overproduced IMHO and lose this raw quality.

Just a suggestion -  to me the song is all about loss, and the word lost appears several times in the lyrics so why not called it Lost as a title. Just a thought ;-)
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Re: Wrote a new song and recorded a cozy home demo
Reply #11 on: September 08, 2017, 17:07:35
Thank you for the sweet words, guys! I've been working on my songwriting and trying to improve hard
so hearing sweet feedback is a real morale boost :) I picked the name for this song impulsively just like I wrote it... I never pay too much attention to song names it's within the song that draws the listeners ear IMHO. Bless!
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