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Thanks, @IsleofSkye . Going to see what I can do with 'Bruised'. 

Donna

Can’t wait!!

@IsleofSkye , here's a quick, basic draft. Probably needs tweaking, but I wanted at least to get it into some kind of context. Was a good exercise. Thank you for throwing the idea out there.  . (I'm a stand-alone lyricist, by the way, so no music is forthcoming, unless you or someone else would care to have a go. I hear it uptempo, pop-rock or something else catchy. )

UPDATE 09.08: Several word changes made, plus a third verse added.

Bruised All Over

V1
When I turn to my right
I remember that night
How you smiled at me
In the candlelight
Your eyes aglow
The half empty bottle of red

V2
When I turn to my left
I remember the web
Of deceit you wove
‘I love you’ you said
And gazed at me
But had someone else in your head

Pre-chorus
Every direction
I move just proves

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Because of you

V3
When I try to move on   
From a time [that’s] long gone
'N wound up with me
The sub-text in your song
I still don’t know how
I thought what was right was so wrong                       

Pre-chorus
Every direction
I move just proves

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Because of you

Bridge
But one of these days
My heart’s going to mend
I’ll meet another woman
To fight for again

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Bruised all over
Because of you

@IsleofSkye , here's a quick, basic draft. Probably needs tweaking, but I wanted at least to get it into some kind of context. Was a good exercise. Thank you for throwing the idea out there.  . (I'm a stand-alone lyricist, by the way, so no music is forthcoming, unless you or someone else would care to have a go. I hear it uptempo, maybe pop, pop-rock or something else catchy. )

Bruised All Over

V1
If I turn to my right
I remember the night
How you smiled at me
In the candlelight
Your eyes all aglow
The half-empty glass of wine

Pre-chorus
Now whatever direction
I try to move in
Has only proven

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Because of you
My heart took a beating
And it’s bruised, bruised all over

V2
If I turn to my left
I remember the web
Of deceit you wove
When you gazed at me
‘I love you’ you said
But had someone else in mind

Pre-chorus
Now whatever direction
I try to move in
Has only proven

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Because of you
My heart took a beating
And it’s bruised, bruised all over

Bridge
But time is a healer
My heart’s going to mend
Then I’ll meet someone
To fight for again

Chorus
My heart took a beating
It's black and blue
Bruised all over
Because of you
My heart took a beating
And it’s bruised, bruised all over

©2020 Donna Devine

Wow Donna!    This is absolutely fantastic! I'm so glad you were able to get the idea and develop it so far!

Whoah @IsleofSkye and @DonMar  ... great work!
Karma for you!
 
I can hear the song in my mind and it is beautiful!!!!